User talk:Sarah5085/Proteolysis targeting chimera

This looks like a solid plan. It looks like you have a well-structured plan to add a development section. Like ENGW3307 said I think clinical trials could work best as a subheading under the new Development section. As you add information I suggest you keep in mind the balance of the article, so that no section looks larger (and therefore more important) than another unless it actually is. --Anpa12 (talk) 15:59, 16 November 2021 (UTC)

Hi! This is my talk page for my sandbox for my article. Sarah5085 (talk) 15:39, 16 November 2021 (UTC).

I think this is a really good plan. I think for the design/development section, mentioning clinical trials is good. This might be best with a subheading, so see if you can make subsections under this section to help with the organization. I think the structure and mechanism of action can be different sections, or at least different subsections.ENGW3307 (talk) 15:52, 16 November 2021 (UTC)

The contributions you made to the article are really good. The expansion you have done to the mechanism section is effective and useful information. I think the other sections were good to add, and you did a nice job in those sections. I have some small notes, mainly about tone and word choice. First, in the Design and Development section, you use the word "often" many times in the course of a few sentences. Also, I cVHL and CRBN are not defined earlier in the article, so you might want to explain what those are if you think it is appropriate. Lastly, the tone in the Benefits section does not seem right for Wikipedia. Following the WikiEd rubric, I think the tone is not neutral, and the section may be unbalanced. Words like "furthermore" seem atypical for Wikipedia and seem more appropriate for argumentative essays like the review paper. Also, words like "selling-point" indicate a tone that is not neutral. I think the content is good in this section, but some small changes could make this more neutral and balanced for a Wikipedia article. ENGW3307 (talk) 04:25, 6 December 2021 (UTC)