User talk:SarahAnnieShaw/Rebecca Wilson Bresee

= A great start: Instructor response = This is looking so good so far! Great use of an infobox. Glad to see you dividing information into subsections, and the sections themselves are looking good. Smart to have a list of works section. Elizabeth.f.chamberlain (talk) 18:25, 16 March 2020 (UTC)

A few quick style comments
Just a couple revision notes so far:
 * The lead should come at the very beginning of the article, without the heading "Introduction." I encourage you to use a sentence definition (X is a Y) as your first sentence in the lead: "Rebecca Wilson Bresee or Becky Bresee is an animator who joined Disney..." Check out the Style Manual page on Lead Sections for more: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Wikipedia:Manual_of_Style/Lead_section
 * Maybe consider moving the second sentence of your introduction to her biography section. Seems like it's more of a history thing
 * Your headings shouldn't be in small caps form. Just surround them in equals signs

Elizabeth.f.chamberlain (talk) 18:25, 16 March 2020 (UTC)

Additional notes 4.21.2020
To support your notability claim, the "Work on Frozen" section needs to better highlight Bresee's contribution in terms of style, technique, process. For instance: When you say she "paid special attention to the creation of Anna's character," what does that mean? Do any of your sources describe what kinds of changes she made? Since several sources point to that filming-themselves-then-animating technique, maybe you can draw that out a little more, explain how that worked, emphasize that it was Bresee's particular contribution to the animation team. Elizabeth.f.chamberlain (talk) 15:50, 21 April 2020 (UTC)

= Peer Review = I added my peer review of this article. You did a really great job, I hope this helps.

Haley McDaniel (talk) 02:47, 23 March 2020 (UTC)