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Jake's Peer Review
These sources beneficially add to the article. Without these sources, it would appear as though there are gaps in some information in the article. However, I do feel there is more development to come. There could be more research done in some other sections in the article, in which the article only chimed in on. In this case, the article mentioned something and you could go more in depth on it. You already started this process and if you continue what you started, the article will be much better.

"Unfortunately" casts value judgment on what is said, so it should be deleted. And, Jake's comments are spot on. Dr. Bricker — Preceding unsigned comment added by Rbricker (talk • contribs) 21:31, 21 November 2018 (UTC)