User talk:Sarahjowens/sandbox

As it is, it seems more like notes rather than an article. But that's not necessarily a bad thing, your rewrite looks like it will contain a lot more than the original article. The fact that you provided each fact with your source is good too, means you will know exactly where it came from and it will eliminate any doubt about where the information came from. The "new section" in the bottom half looks promising. Looks like it will drastically increase the original pages content. I would try and leave leave links to each programs's official website so that people who read your article can be directed to your source information. Maybe go into what the programs are trying to accomplish and how it is trying to reach it's goals. Perhaps a small paragraph that's an overview of what each program wants the public to do at the end of each program mentioned?