User talk:Sarahmey/sandbox

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I'm an online ambassador for your WMST 250: Women, Art, and Culture (2014 Q3) class and have just stopped by to provide a quick review and add what I hope will be helpful comments.

You've done a really nice job writing about Nil Yalter. It's well-written and well-organized. Content is cited with well-formatted citations.

A couple of thoughts / suggestions:
 * Regarding "This piece expresses the idea that women who are thought of as exotic, like belly dancers, are not given a full identity by hiding their faces." I'm not sure what "are not given full identity by hiding their faces" means - do you mean that they're objectified, and as a result their unique identities are not discerned?
 * Generally, it's not good to use a living person's website as a source, and I never use it, but it may not be an issue for information that could be otherwise easily verified.

Great job! You made the review process a very easy one! I'll be watching this page and your sandbox page for any updates. You can also "ping" me (just type "" as you see it) to your message on this page or leave a message on my talk page. Happy editing!-- CaroleHenson  ( talk ) 13:14, 2 November 2014 (UTC)


 * You may want to take a look at Janise Yntema for a sense of what an introduction or lede would look like. Wikipedia articles start with a "lead" section, which is a short summary of everything in the article. For some articles this summary can be a few paragraphs. Others (like Yntema's article and probably this one) can be a few sentences long.-- CaroleHenson  ( talk ) 03:38, 4 November 2014 (UTC)


 * It looks like you're close to ready to move to article space. See Moving a page for helpful tips.-- CaroleHenson  ( talk ) 20:46, 14 November 2014 (UTC)