User talk:Saramichha/sandbox

Feedback from Isabella De Marchena
Sara Ha, I just read through your Wiki contribution. Great job. I think that your writing tone and style is appropriate for Wikipedia. You also chose appropriate titles for your headers. There are a few recommendations that I want to make. The first recommendation is to edit your sentences. They tend to run on the long side. Second, make sure your paragraphs have at least three to seven sentences. Right now some of your paragraphs only have two sentences. You are right on track, so good job, and good luck on your final revision. Best of luck, Isabella De Marchena

Feedback Ishaan tiwari
Hey, just read through your sandbox. I think your writing is very appropriate. Descriptions are written in a neutral tone and everything is cited well. I liked how you divided your page up in to very discernible sections. Your layout is very similar to that of a standard Wikipedia page, which is great. I think you have a good base to build upon, and good luck to you in your final piece. — Preceding unsigned comment added by I9T1997 (talk • contribs) 18:27, 18 June 2018 (UTC)