User talk:Sarita3940/sandbox

Peer Review

In general, I think the organization of your article flows well and is easier to read than the existing Wikipedia article. My only suggestion here might be to insert the "Styles and Influences" section before "Artistic Career". Specifically, the information under the "Paris, France" subsection is quite informative and makes the article and the subject more interesting. Similarly, I think the "Styles and Influences" section is an important addition to Wegener's story and representation as an artist.

Throughout the article, be mindful of Wikipedia's guidelines regarding neutrality. At your discretion, I think that several phrases (“best capturing”, “ sought-after”, “controversial”, “very famous”) in your article may be removed or changed to maintain a neutral tone. I'm not sure how you're planning on integrating your sandbox article with the existing one, but I would keep as much correct information/images as possible and let the Wikipedia editors trim it down.

Finally, I'm not sure if the information exists, but I'd be curious to find out more about Wegener's reception as the controversial artist she appears to be. Her and her wife's stories seem to be incredibly interesting. I found a ton of the information in my article by searching "Elsie Ward" on google scholar. In summary, the organization of the article and the personification of the subject have really improved with your additions. Great work!

Let me know if you have any questions or want help with the citations or anything else, Fernbush (talk) 21:43, 3 July 2020 (UTC)

Peer Review Response — Preceding unsigned comment added by 2601:152:4000:3AF0:7919:973A:C10:2216 (talk) 13:28, 7 July 2020 (UTC) These are really good points that you made and I will use them for the sandbox here. I will move the "styles and influences" section because that will help with organization, which is something I forgot to consider. Also, I think I will look into the article you mentioned for sure. I think the original articles really does say enough about that and I did not want to draw away from her career as an artists because I felt it was overshadowed in the original/current article. The original/current one also has a section about "The Danish Girl" which adds to that topic. However, I will definitely look into finding more beneficial and useful information about Gerda and Lili because it is interesting and is a part of her name. Thank you so much for the feedback.

2601:14F:C201:30B6:502E:2C0F:880B:6949 (talk) 03:40, 6 July 2020 (UTC)Sarita3940