User talk:Sasha-urban/sandbox

= Evaluations for Antwerp (Edit 1)(since removed) =

4/24/2019 Evaluation by KStein91

 * Points: 39/40
 * Grade: 98%

Spelling/Grammar
Exceeds standard: great job!

Language
Exceeds standard: great professional tone throughout.

Organization
Exceeds standard: easy to read and follow.

Coding
Exceeds standard: looks great!

Validity
Nearly meets standard: I am concerned that your sources are from websites and newspapers and not peer reviewed sources.

Completion
Meets standard: looks great, again though make sure your sources are non-biased.

Relevance
Meets standard: looks good.

Citation
Meets standard: well used citations.

5/4/2019 Evaluation by DrMichaelWright
DrMichaelWright (talk) 13:58, 4 May 2019 (UTC)

There really is some good material here, and I see that you've also put it on Wikipedia proper. I hope you'll take my feedback here and implement the slight adjustments on the live Wikipedia page.


 * Points: 37.5/40
 * Grade: 93.75%

Spelling/Grammar
Meets standard.

Language
Meets standard.
 * "... and even experienced a second boom..." A little less superlative language would fit Wikipedia's encyclopedic style just a little better.
 * The word 'however' in your second-to-last sentence does not seem to refer to the preceding sentence about the AWDC, but to the ups and downs of the market, which you write into place earlier in the paragraph.

Organization
Meets standard. I added some headers for port and diamonds to Wikipedia proper.

Coding
Meets standard.

Validity
Nearly meets standard.
 * "85 percent of the world's..." your source says 84%.
 * "Antwerp's history in the diamond trade dates back to as early as the sixteenth century,[1] with the first diamond cutters guild being introduced in 1584." Your source says 1447, which is the fifteenth century.
 * You mention 'recent years' referencing a source from 2006, which is longer ago than 'recent years'. That may not mean that this assessment is invalid, but it's hard to really know without more up-to-date information.

Completion
Meets standard. The actual added material is a little thin, but just enough to pass muster.

Relevance
Meets standard.

5/15/2019 Evaluation by Npearso2

 * Points: 32/40
 * Grade: 80%

Spelling/Grammar
Meets expectations

Language
Meets expectations

Organization
Nearly meets standard: The last paragraph has events in 2015, then in the 1980s. Consider rearranging some of your text to reflect the correct timeline.

Coding
Meets standard: The links to other pages work and are appropriately placed.

Validity
Meets standard: The content itself seems relevant to the page.

Completion
Nearly complete: Some of your sections are quite small. It makes it seem like there is information missing.

Relevance
Nearly meets standard: The bit about FIAT seems out of place for this section on food and doesn't give much context.

Citation
Meets standard.

Spelling/Grammar
Few errors, if any.

Language
Writing is clear and straightforward. Good work

Organization
Here is where you could do more work. I would start in a more general way, expanding on the first sentence. The chocolate discussion should be further down into the section.

Coding
Looks great to me.

Validity
Your sources all look appropriate for the website

Completion
There are gaps in the information. I know it is still a work in progress. It is interesting to read. That the city is trying to brand itself as a center of food should be supported with more examples. More general information about the food culture would round out the article.

Relevance
The information about the farmers markets, how the city is trying to become a center of food tourism is relevant. Some of the details aren't yet as relevant as they could be.

Citation
Are all very good

5/17/2019 Evaluation by KStein91

 * Points: 40.5/40

Spelling/Grammar
Exceeds standard: great job!

Language
Meets standard: great professional tone throughout, thanks for noting the preexisting text.

Organization
Exceeds standard: easy to read and follow.

Coding
Exceeds standard: looks great!

Validity
Meets standard: looks like some solid information.

Completion
Meets standard: looks great, easy to follow.

Relevance
Meets standard: looks good.

Citation
Meets standard: well used citations, throughout.

5/30/2019 Evaluation by DrMichaelWright
DrMichaelWright (talk) 11:49, 30 May 2019 (UTC) Wonderful!!
 * Points: 40.5/40
 * Grade: 101.25%

Spelling/Grammar
Meets standard.
 * '...some time...' should be sometime, or omitted altogether since it is so inspecific.

Language
Nearly meets standard.
 * "...in the economy today" sounds too conversational and/or iffy on the timeliness.
 * Use of present tense where past tense is required: "By 2014, the cultural sector employed 6.6% of the province's workers and generates." should be 'generated
 * "One of the things the Turin is known for is chocolate" comes after "Turin is well known for its farmers markets." Perhaps "Another thing Turin is known for is chocolate," would fit a little better.
 * Fiat is not normally written in all caps, even if it is an acronym. In this context, it may also be useful to direct the reader to an earlier part of the page, e.g. "After the decline of Fiat(see above), Turin has..." Of course, that calls into question the degree to which this is accurate information (see below).
 * "... thanks to..." is not neutral language. Perhaps 'due to' would be better here.

Organization
Meets standard. When it's said and done, I think that the paragraph on chocolate might deserve a subheader under this section, but maybe if another sub-section is also more fleshed out.

Coding
Meets standard. There is a problem in the Berghaus reference, but you clearly shine in your otherwise sophisticated use of code.

Validity
Meets standard. I think you might be making too much of Fiat Chrystler's global HQ being in London. Fiat, the daughter company, is still headquartered in Turin. Does one of your sources argue that Fiat has declined? It seems like your source is not so much saying that Fiat declined as in that Turin has rebranded itself in order to get out of Fiat's industrial shadow.

Completion
Meets standard.

Relevance
Meets standard.

Spelling/Grammar
you can edit out the extra punctuation, and the awkward wording throughout. It reads like the rough draft it is.

Language
I found it straightforward and interesting to read. You could start each section of without having to say ... has a history in Odessa.

Organization
The organization makes sense. The sub-heading, Christianity, ought to stand out more.

Coding
looks good

Validity
seems good to me.

Completion
You could balance out the long and very interesting section on Judiasm with a little more about the other religions.

Relevance
Good

Citation
You should use the same style of citations throughout

06/09/2019 Evaluation by Npearso2

 * Points: 30/40
 * Grade: 75%

Spelling/Grammar
Nearly meets standard. There are several instances of excessive comma usage and wordy sentences. The last sentence in the Orthodoxy section is a bit run on.

Language
Nearly meets standard. The tone is not very encyclopedic at times. The first paragraph introduction is especially awkward. You write "furthermore" then the next sentence is "on the other hand." I would suggest reworking this and removing the "furthermore."

Organization
Meets standard. Overall, the organization makes sense. There is one sentence at the end of the Protestantism section about Pentecostals that it out of place in both timeline and section organization.

Coding
Meets standard. The hyperlinks to other pages work and are relevant.

Validity
Meets standard: Most of the content is solid.

Completion
Does not meet standard. You have a disproportionate amount of information on Judaism and Orthodoxy in this edit. The smaller sections feel very incomplete in the historical aspect and are virtually nonexistent in the present day relevance.

Relevance
Nearly meets standard. Some content seems irrelevant. The detail of pogroms in the Jewish history section is disproportionate to the amount of detail in the other sections. For example, I do not see the relevance of mentioning the "Odessa Tales."

Citation
Does not meet standard. Not all claims have associated citations. Citations also appear to be a mixture of MLA and APA format.

Spelling/Grammar
Standard: looks good but agree with our peers that some sentences appear to run on.

Language
Standard: looks good

Organization
Standard: looks good, however the blank heading of Christianity is distracting, it looks like you wanted to add information but didn't.

Coding
Standard: everything looks good, except I think something happened to your sources. It appears there are some stray numbers by many of your references that don't link to your references. I know that you are out of country, but I hope that you can fix or remove those extra numbers. I like your table and the pictures your included.

Validity
Standard: I like the information that you included, looks good and well researched.

Completion
Standard: lots of information on the Orthodoxy and Judaism, however I don't know why you included the heading of Christianity without any information below it, makes the article look unfinished. Or was the heading supposed to read "Orthodoxy Christianity".

Relevance
Standard: appears to be relevant but my concerns are listed in organization/completion, some of your article looks unfinished because of the lack of information included.

Citation
Standard: looks complete but as other peers have said it appears that some claims are not backed up with sources such as the claim that

6/17/2019 Evaluation by DrMichaelWright
DrMichaelWright (talk) 20:03, 17 June 2019 (UTC)

This is so well done! I hope you integrate it onto the Odessa page, with a couple of tweaks (see below).
 * Points: 41.5/40
 * Grade: 103.75%

Spelling/Grammar
Meets standard.
 * "...and one monastery in the city..." insert 'left' after monastery.
 * "In 1824, Italian architect Francesco Boffo built..." 'In 1824,the Italian architect...' sounds a bit nicer.

Language
Meets standard.
 * "...came under trial,..." is a strange phrase. Could you make this clearer?

Organization
Meets standard.
 * It's best to have at least some paragraph under the 4th-level header 'Christianity'. Level 4 and 5 look so similar that the Christianity header just seems like it's a placeholder. Perhaps some paragraph that introduces the sections below it.
 * Regarding the placement of your table. I think it's best right under the bit about the 19th century stuff, and above the 20th century material. That would also break up the preceding paragraph, which is a little on the long side.
 * The Jewish History header is odd, because the other religions are just the names of the religion. Why should Judaism be treated differently?

Coding
Exceeds standard.
 * Very well done!!

Validity
Meets standard.

Completion
Exceeds standard.
 * Superb! with table and pictures.

Relevance
Meets standard.