User talk:SavannahShir/

Coquitlam River Peer Review
Overall, I really enjoyed reading this article. As a local, I grew up often visiting the Coquitlam river. Even as a local, I found that this article contained information I never knew about the river. For example, I was unaware that the dam diverted water from the Coquitlam river into Buntzen lake.

I think the structure of your article flows well, paragraphs are correctly separated, and that the species tables in the 'Ecology' section are very useful! You could embed wiki URLs for each species in the tables, although I also don't think its necessary. I think my group (Glacial streams) could integrate something similar to your ecology tables into our article as well.

The article is well-balanced, diverse, and is written with a professional and neutral tone. It highlights the most important information without providing irrelevant details. Transition between writers is integrated pretty well, however, there are inconsistencies with citations in sentences. Some citations are placed before the period, and some are placed after it. There are grammatical errors throughout the article (mainly missing commas), so I recommend spending some time proof reading.

For the most part, I think the lead is strong. For the sentence "The name is a reference to one of the many salmonid species that occupy the rivers waters.[1]" in the 'Lead' section, I think you should include what salmonid species is being referenced. I noticed later in the article that this sentence was written again, but this time it included which species it was in reference to. I think this sentence only needs to be included once in the article. Also, when you mention COSEWIC in the 'Lead' section, this is the first time you mention it so you should define what it stands for.

There is an adequate amount of references and they all appear to be reliable. Authors do not rely heavily on one or two sources, and integrate several sources into each paragraph. Some sentences are uncited. Some sentences appear to have information that does not match their cited sources. For example in the 'lead' section, "The river is home to various mammals, birds, fish, and plants as well as the people of the Kwikwetlem first nations.[4]". I could not find where this reference mentioned the Kwikwetlem first nations.

I would recommend embedding wiki URLs for the following words in your article: SARA, COSEWIC, riparian, hydrology, blue-listed species

In the 'Human use and impacts' section, I thought it could be a good idea to include the impact that invasive species have on the river ecosystem. You could discuss the reasons why invasive species are a threat and what the community is doing to combat the problem. For example, I know that Japanese knotweed is one invasive species in the area and it is known to cause bank erosion. There are signs placed on trails along the Coquitlam river advising the public not to pull / cut this plant.

Lastly, there were a few spots in the article where I was left wanting clarification or to know more:

- For the sentence "These high discharge events have been known to last a couple days with larger precipitation events." in the 'Setting' section, do you mean these high discharge events last a couple days after large precipitation events occur?

- In the 'Human use and impacts' section, I felt like I wanted to learn a little more about the connection that the indigenous people have with this river / watershed. How did they historically interact with it vs. how do they interact with it now?

- For the sentence "Red-legged frogs were observed in the upper reaches, however possible breeding habitat was also identified and recommended as a viable location for restoration." in the 'Conservation and threats' section, where is the possible breeding habitat located?

- For the sentence "Due to the sensitve nature of this amphibian, it was also recommended to avoid pond draining and ditching cleaning during breeding times.[14]" in the 'Conservation and threats' section, who made the recommendation to avoid this?

KVesterg (talk) 21:01, 1 April 2021 (UTC)