User talk:Sbonni/sandbox

Hi Sbonni! Your article draft is very well written. The information is concise, interesting, and flows well. I do have a few things you may want to consider to improve the article. Add an introduction so that the reader knows exactly what acidification is and how it occurs. Though your information is organized well, you may want to add section headings separating introduction, environmental impacts, and human element. The main way that I think you could strengthen your article is by adding specific examples of times and places where acidification has occurred. This will allow you to elaborate on some of the points you made and lengthen the article. It might also give you potential to link to other wikipedia articles, which Dr. Carmichael said she will be looking for. Lastly, it appears that you don't have the correct code for your reference list. However, this should be a simple fix, just ask Dr. Carmichael for the code. Overall, nicely written, and lots of potential for a great article! Jchappuis (talk) 18:14, 24 October 2013 (UTC)

B.J.Carmichael Feedback
Jchappuis has provided good suggestions for improving your contribution. Your article needs more development at this time and needs to be specifically about the Arctic Ocean Acidification. The basis is sound, clearly written and organized, but missing key points. The code for References is to indicate with a header where you want references to go, such as "==References==" and then to place "reflist" below in between. This should format the references correctly. Continue developing your ideas, incorporate Wikipedia links, and support ideas with peer-reviewed scientific articles. B.J.Carmichael (talk) 22:26, 5 November 2013 (UTC)