User talk:Schofich/Hagar International

This is not intended to be an advertisement, it is purely informational, and I am working on rewriting portions of the article so that less of the information is taken from the Hagar websites. Unfortunately Hagar's work is not talked about in that many other sources, meaning that Hagar's resources are the ones that can provide us with the most valuable information about what the organization is and does. Schofich (talk) 18:10, 23 March 2011 (UTC)
 * Just a few comments, Schofich. To start, the first paragraph, the lede, has some issues.  It doesn't match up with our manual of style of what needs to appear in the lede paragraph (see WP:LEDE), and it reads as though you copy-pasted the text from somewhere, which creates legal issues with how Wikipedia is licensed.  I am assuming you did not, but the content needs to be rewritten to make this more clear.
 * Second, the article does read sorta' spam-y. Try not to use language that inflates the importance of Hagar without providing real information.  For example, a phrase like "Blue Company is a nationally recognized leader in the production of..." are discouraged, while "Blue Company produces..." is preferred.  See WP:WEASEL for more information.
 * Third, if reliable, third party sources which explicitly cover Hagar in some detail don't exist, Hagar is not likely to be considered "notable" by Wikipedia's standards. Because it is not the job of an encyclopedia to list every non-profit which has ever existed (or every of most things, for that matter), we usually only presume that a subject is worthy of an article if other people (such as newspapers, scholars, and the like) care enough about it to write something down.  There are also some specialty criteria for organizations that you might want to look at, but it does not seem from your above content that Hagar is quite ready for an article yet.  I do not suggest you move this page into the main article space until these sorts of sources exist.  Cheers, and feel free to ask me questions at my talk page.  lifebaka++ 19:30, 23 March 2011 (UTC)