User talk:SchwandtB

Greetings Editors:

This is regarding the article on "Public Notice".

I represent conservative thinkers and I take issue with the following section:

heir speaker slip happens to come to the top of the pile, and they are subject to being cut off after their two minutes or three minutes are up.This equalization between expert and lay commentator is an example of social leveling which occurs in democratic process and which is often harshly criticized by elitist theorists such as Machiavellians, fascists, communist technocrats and other conservative social thinkers.Italic text

Persons preparing public comment often think about and express the value of the constitutional protection and a certain level of gratitude for the opportunity to speak. Such expressions are ....

I do not see the logic connecting "conservative social thinkers" with any of the preceding nouns in that sentence. Fascists, for example, can be either liberal OR conservative, as we see in the news today. If you can help me connect the dots, thank you.

If, on the other hand, you agree with my assessment, then I would request the sentence be changed from "conservative social thinkers" to simply "thinkers".

Better grammar, (and less controversial) would be to simply end the sentence after "technocrats" like this:

This equalization between expert and lay commentator is an example of social leveling which occurs in democratic process and which is often harshly criticized by elitist theorists such as Machiavellians, fascists, and communist technocrats.

Still a complete sentence, much more accurate, and much less offensive.

Oh, yeah, and it all appears to be original work - are there references? I thought arguments had to be supported by outside reference?

Thank you for your response SchwandtB (talk) 02:28, 20 June 2017 (UTC) SchwandtB (talk) 02:32, 20 June 2017 (UTC)