User talk:Scooper24601/sandbox

Peer Review
Scooper24601, I thought your article was well written. You did a nice job of describing the style and techniques that Ramberg incorporated into her paintings and how some of those techniques changed over the course of her career. I think the main critique I had of the article was simply spelling errors. Below is a list of the errors I found:

Aside from these errors, I think you did a nice job adding to this article. You did a great job of staying neutral and incorporated many sources into the article. Mathias94 (talk) 02:02, 18 April 2018 (UTC)Mathias94
 * 1) "Christina Ramberg was born on August 12, 1946 ton the Kentucky military base of Camp Cambell (Campbell)..."
 * 2) "but was unable to due to a lack of financial resources, although she did eventually taught (teach) music lessons..."
 * 3) "This is also where she met her husband Philip Hanson who was also an art student who studied with Yoshida and is also considered a member of the Chicago Imagists group. They got (Consider replacing with “were”) married in 1968..."
 * 4) "Indeed, Ramberg has been characterized as being the Chicago Imagist equivalent of Lee Krasner to the Jackson Pollock male artists of the movement (such ad (as) Ed Paschke and Jim Nutt) ..."

Thanks Matt, I'll be going back through soon to check for all the errors and any structure issues. Scooper24601 (talk) 15:43, 25 April 2018 (UTC)

Article feedback
Hi Scooper24601,

Wow, you made major contributions to this article! Well-done. I see a flurry of edits by other Wikipedians/bots after your work, too, which I think is usually a good sign. Your contributions required a comprehensive knowledge of Ramberg which required a great deal of work on your part. I appreciate the biographical info additions which I agree, help inform us about her artwork.

The article has been flagged for language that deviates from the encyclopedic tone, and I noticed some typos--perhaps print out your edits after making them to double-check the work. It's difficult to catch typos staring at a computer screen. Also, beware the run-on sentence! They are your Achilles's heel and could be part of the reason the article was flagged for language.

Example: "This is also where she met her husband Philip Hanson who was also an art student who studied with Yoshida and is also considered a member of the Chicago Imagists group."

Also, make sure to cite every fact. For example, from where is this information? "Ramberg and Hanson had one son, Alexander, who was born in 1976, although they did have a late term miscarriage before Alex, and both experiences greatly impacted her art." How do we know both experiences greatly impacted her art? That sentence is also a run-on.

All in all, great work! You found some new sources and I see you greatly expanded her exhibition list too. This article really stands out. Zipperbrown (talk) 20:53, 7 May 2018 (UTC)