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Thank you for your copy edition of the Waterloo Campaign series, in particular your work on Waterloo Campaign, 8–15 June (diff). I have a couple of requests.

If a paragraph carries citations, if you split the paragraph into two or more, or move text from one to another, then please check add the citations to both paragraphs. To take the first instance that you edited:

Napoleon had selected for the line of his main operations the direct road to Brussels, by Charleroi—the road on which Wellington's left wing, and Blücher's right wing respectively rested.

As the Prussians' front line covered Charleroi and the French territory immediately to the south of Charleroi, while the Anglo-Allies' most advanced outpost was further up the Charleroi–Brussels road at Frasnes (about 10 mi north of Charleroi), he planned to overcome the Prussian army, and then attack the Anglo-allied troops before they could be collected in sufficient strength to prevent his further progress. Napoleon's grand object was to impede the junction of the two armies; to vanquish them in detail; to establish himself in Brussels; to arouse the dense population in Belgium, of which a vast proportion secretly adhered to his cause; to re-annex the country to the French Empire; to excite the desertion of the Belgian soldiery from the service of the Netherlands; to prevent a check by these means to the operations of the invading Armies crossing the Rhine; perhaps also to enter into negotiations; and, at all events, to gain, what was to him of vital importance, time for the advance and cooperation of further reinforcements from France.

Napoleon had selected for the line of his main operations the direct road to Brussels, by Charleroi—the road on which Wellington's left wing, and Blücher's right wing rested. As the Prussians' front line covered Charleroi and the French territory immediately to the south of Charleroi, and the Anglo-Allies' most advanced outpost was further up the Charleroi–Brussels road at Frasnes (about 10 mi north of Charleroi), he planned to first overcome the Prussian army, and then attack the Anglo-allied troops before they could deploy properly.

Napoleon's grand object was to prevent the two armies combining and destroy them both; to establish himself in Brussels; to arouse the dense population in Belgium (of which a vast proportion secretly adhered to his cause); to re-annex the country to the French Empire; to excite the desertion of the Belgian soldiery from the service of the Netherlands; to discourage invading Armies from crossing the Rhine; perhaps also to enter into negotiations - and most Imortant of all, to gain time to gather and train reinforcements from France.

Napoleon had selected for the line of his main operations the direct road to Brussels, by Charleroi—the road on which Wellington's left wing, and Blücher's right wing rested. As the Prussians' front line covered Charleroi and the French territory immediately to the south of Charleroi, and the Anglo-Allies' most advanced outpost was further up the Charleroi–Brussels road at Frasnes (about 10 mi north of Charleroi), he planned to first overcome the Prussian army, and then attack the Anglo-allied troops before they could deploy properly.

Napoleon's grand object was to prevent the two armies combining and destroy them both; to establish himself in Brussels; to arouse the dense population in Belgium (of which a vast proportion secretly adhered to his cause); to re-annex the country to the French Empire; to excite the desertion of the Belgian soldiery from the service of the Netherlands; to discourage invading Armies from crossing the Rhine; perhaps also to enter into negotiations - and most Imortant of all, to gain time to gather and train reinforcements from France.

Likewise if you add a sentence that is a copy edit and not an addition of new facts then please move the citation to include it, otherwise it looks like a new fact that needs covering with a citation:

Your edit:
 * During the day, more information was brought to the troops of Prussian I Corps (Zieten's), by the country people who were seeking some place of safety for their cattle. Their stories confirmed the above, and and also that Napoleon, and of his brother Jerome had arrived.

Your edit with alteration to the placing of the citation:
 * During the day, more information was brought to the troops of Prussian I Corps (Zieten's), by the country people who were seeking some place of safety for their cattle. Their stories confirmed the above, and and also that Napoleon, and of his brother Jerome had arrived.



-- PBS (talk) 06:27, 28 October 2016 (UTC)

Thank you for your edits to at 04:21, 30 October 2016 to Waterloo Campaign, 8–15 June. Did I not make my explanation above clear enough. That if you split paragraphs up as you did with:

Then please add the inline citation to each new paragraph and not just at the end of the last paragraph.

Also please be careful not to change the meaning of sentence when you copy edit them: -- PBS (talk) 13:01, 30 October 2016 (UTC)
 * The text read "French fires was observed by observation outposts" you changed it to "French fires was observed by outposts" "observation outposts" are specifically there to observe. There are other types of outposts which have other functions. So observation [out]post is a military term of art. See for example the article Flagstaff hill incident for more modern usage.
 * "a circumstance which induced Napoleon to make some alteration in his dispositions." to "Because of this Napoleon to make some slight alteration in his dispositions." why "slight" and not "some"?
 * "The morning of 15 June had scarcely broken," to "Early in the morning of 15 June". The former implies just after dawn (which at this time of year would be around 05:00, your new wording implies some time after midnight perhaps as early as 01:00.


 * In the end I decided that "Early in the morning of 15 June" was better, because the footnote I've added show that dawn (at 3:45) came after the first meeting of French column and Prussian picket.


 * Please do not start a sentence with "But" when writing for an encyclopaedia. As per this source
 * 'We sound more formal (sometimes, almost stuffy) when we use "however" instead of "but." Yet certain situations do call for the less casual tone, and business writing is often one of them.'
 * -- PBS (talk) 15:32, 6 November 2016 (UTC)