User talk:Sdejean7/sandbox

Assignment 1
Hi, the article on Australian Hip-Hop does need some copyediting help, so go ahead and work on it. Adding new information, however, is not part of this assignment. You can of course do it on your own, but make sure you also do some copyediting. Josef Horáček (talk) 20:50, 7 February 2015 (UTC)

Assignment 2
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sabbath I chose to add sources to this because there was very little information on my previous topic.

Here are the four sources: Pastoral Psychology. Feb2013, Vol. 62 Issue 1, p13-26. 14p. Puritan Reformed Journal. Jan2014, Vol. 6 Issue 1, p215-233. 19p. Verbum et Ecclesia. 2011, Vol. 32 Issue 1, p1-8. 8p. Journal of Religion & Health. Dec2013, Vol. 52 Issue 4, p1382-1390. 9p. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Sdejean7 (talk • contribs) 00:13, 13 February 2015 (UTC)

The article you chose is a big mess and potentially controversial. But if you think you can strengthen it with the sources you chose, go ahead. Josef Horáček (talk) 20:28, 16 February 2015 (UTC)
 * Please finish the assignment and move on to the next one. Josef Horáček (talk) 19:34, 24 February 2015 (UTC)
 * "Wage" was a good choice for an article, but you only added two sources. Also, your claim that the gender income gap has to do with market forces may be supported by the source you found, but it's not a generally accepted view. Most scholars would agree that it's simply an effect of prejudice. Josef Horáček (talk) 09:18, 2 March 2015 (UTC)

Assignment 3
Your draft of the lead is a good start, but it still needs work. First and foremost, your comment about software piracy is incorrect. Piracy was rampant in the 1990s and I bet it still is today, especially outside the U.S. You also need to revise for style and tighten up your claims. For example, at the end, saying "almost everyone" is too fuzzy. Same with "almost a necessity." Find a more accurate way of presenting the information. Josef Horáček (talk) 09:25, 2 March 2015 (UTC)
 * The style could still be tightened, but good job overall. Josef Horáček (talk) 03:54, 10 March 2015 (UTC)