User talk:Sdenviogeo/Decontamination foam

Peer Review
I like that you tried to condense the intro paragraph to be further succinct, but I would suggest leaving the intro paragraph as it exists on the page currently. You version is very clear and efficient, but I believe the intro as it exists in the current page provides quick examples that increase the understanding of the topic when reading just the intro paragraph. Alternatively, if you add a little more detail, such as the composition of decon foam, to your intro this may also alleviate the detail discrepancy while improving the efficiency of the intro.

The structure as it exists is good and if you are to add another section, the way you are currently formatting your contribution is good. My main comment to try to improve on this is just to make sure to link scientific words you use in the page to their corresponding Wikipedia page. Moving forwards, I would try to cover additional topics related to decontamination foam, such as examples of use scenarios. The section of effectiveness is useful, but to improve, I would make sure to vary the information you contribute a bit more, as the current article on the article page itself does not do a good job citing any of the topics it covers.

The content you have written maintains a very good tone. The writing appears neutral in nature and does not take any “sides”, with the language doing a good job to avoid generalizations.

The sources you are using are quite good and seem to do a good job justifying your points. They are also fairly recent which is great, giving that some of these topics are harder to find recent reviews papers for. Keep up the good work with the reference use. Overall, the additions you have drafted are good, the main criticisms I have are just that there needs to be coverage of additional areas regarding decontamination foam to flesh out the coverage a bit and to make sure to link to other Wikipedia pages within the article. Good luck with your work on the final article submission!

Erikheit (talk) 21:17, 4 November 2021 (UTC)