User talk:Sdesmondnz

January 2020
Hello, Sdesmondnz. We welcome your contributions, but if you have an external relationship with the people, places or things you have written about in the page BR Standard Class 5 73082 Camelot, you may have a conflict of interest (COI). Editors with a conflict of interest may be unduly influenced by their connection to the topic. See the conflict of interest guideline and FAQ for organizations for more information. We ask that you:


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Also, editing for the purpose of advertising, publicising, or promoting anyone or anything is not permitted. Thank you. -- Red rose64 &#x1f339; (talk) 15:04, 30 January 2020 (UTC)

Hello Redrose64. Thank you for your explanation re Conflict of Interest. Here is my reply to your post re the 73082 Camelot Wikipedia article.

There are three areas of concern around the article, that could be usefully addressed to improve it. Here they are, together with remedies that could be actioned by someone with no association with the 73082 Camelot Locomotive Society.

1. Issue: The opening paragraph is not a summary of the content, but is a history of the locomotive up to 1959. Remedy: Move the paragraph into the main text and draft a new introduction.

2. Issue: The article needs additional citations. Remedy: Find and document them from the References, Further Reading and External Links.

3. Issue: The information content in the article is sparse. Remedy: Further research in the References etc.

The References etc include the Society's own publications. These may not be acceptable sources.

I hope these suggestions are useful.

Sdesmondnz (talk) 04:22, 29 March 2020 (UTC)
 * This is the sort of thing that the article's talk page - Talk:BR Standard Class 5 73082 Camelot - is provided for. More at WP:TALK. -- Red rose64 &#x1f339; (talk) 16:21, 30 March 2020 (UTC)