User talk:Sdevreede/sandbox

Hi there! Looks like we have our PE org in common! You are missing your article evaluation section, so check out your peer Nick Allen's page for reference of how to format it. Come visit my OH if you can so we can talk more about this assignment and how it can relate to your PE. -Momo Sumomox4nouchi (talk) 02:16, 8 February 2019 (UTC)sumomox4nouchi

Scholarly Sources
Hi Shiraz! Nice sources, I counted them all. As for formatting this section, please refer to Clare's instructions: Start a new section in your sandbox, call it "Scholarly Sources". Give this two sub-sections, one "Area" and one "Sector" and begin listing the fully cited sources. Make it look like a bibliography, even if you add in a link to the actual online source. A reader should be able to look at your list in your sandbox and see the authors' names, title of articles or books, names of journals or publishing presses, etc., without having to click on a link. Write 1-3 sentences in which you briefly summarize the article's focus and approach, and say how you plan to use it for your PE prep/Wikipedia drafting/final 105 paper. -Momo Sumomox4nouchi (talk) 19:23, 15 February 2019 (UTC)sumomox4nouchi

Julia's Peer Review
Hi Shiraz! All of your drafting looks really good as a whole.

For this section: For children and young adults, participation in the American public school system is a significant contributor to integration. Education plays a strong role in nationhood, where a sense of unity emerges among student cohorts who go through an education system together.[2] For young migrant populations, public education serves as one of the strongest mechanisms of integration as the American education system largely focuses on "Americanization", the development of a national consciousness.

I really like how you're adding more to the "Immigration Integration" section, because that section is very sparse compared to the section before it. I think the wording here is very neutral and succinct, so everything is clear in your original sentences. Good job!

For this statement: "Nevertheless, refugee students have one of the lowest rates of access to education." Maybe be more specific, lowest rates of access to education compared to who? Or maybe state "refugee students have a low rate of access of education compared to non-refugee children" or something of that manner?

For this one: Also, children with unpredictable migration trajectories suffer most from a lack of schooling because of a lack of uniform schooling in each of their destinations before settling.

Is there a citation that goes with that? Professor Talwalker said that there should be a citation for basically everything we write!

Other than that, good job!

Jsumera (talk) 06:56, 4 April 2019 (UTC)

Anna G's peer review

Area: Education if Immigrant in the United States I really like your idea of incorporating the importance of education when it comes to successful integration. The only thing I would add to this section are examples (if you can find any) of successful programs that prove the effectiveness of education for youth integration. Have you stumbled across any success stories or effective/successful programs? Other than that, you did a good job of citing your sources and keeping a neutral tone!

Sector: Refugee Children Again, good citation of sources and inputting them smoothly! Under the “Structure of Classes” subsection, maybe you can add examples of the UNCHR's global strategies you mentioned. Under the subsection “Residence”, when you mentioned that families who are unable to move to urban centers are at a disadvantage- maybe you can add examples of what their school encompasses and why it is not ideal for refugee children. Also, a thought that came to mind when reading this- what do refugee children do instead when they are not in school during the day? Might be interesting to look into that and how that adds to harming their process of integration?

Diego Parada's Peer-Review
The article reads well. I see no inherent biases and since you are working on a whole page, you have the liberty to really build a strong foundation and that is being done. The statistics are really great because it numerically validates the entry as a whole. What would be interesting to dive into further would be the country specifics, like from which countries these migrants are coming from. Maybe explain the pull Africa has. Why do people migrate to Ivory Coast? Why do they migrate to South Africa (and Angola)? Understandably, that may be for my article to answer; yet to leave a key to that article would be useful. You provide an interesting bit on the regional institutions. I do have to say, it is hard to know when to draw the line when speaking about them. You provide enough information to give readers the know-what about them, but not the whole idea. I don't think this is a problem, but I would keep it in mind. Otherwise, you're doing a solid job. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Diego.Pa28 (talk • contribs) 03:39, 7 April 2019 (UTC)