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Article evaluation
The Great Hall of the People Wikipedia article is part of the Architecture Wikiproject where it is rated Start-Class and Low-Importance. It is also a part of the China Wikiproject where it is rated Start-Class and High-Importance.

The article still needs a lot of revision and new content. While the article remains fairly neutral throughout and staying fairly fact based on statistics and events, the tone of the article feels more like a brochure for the building and less like an encyclopedia article. There are only a few specifically distracting or unclear moments in the article: In the introduction, “which occurs every year during March” and “a political advisory body” can both be omitted and put into the articles “Usage” section instead since they do not flow within their current sentence. The phrase “The centre peaks at 46.5 meters” is somewhat unclear and could be rephrased. Perhaps something along the lines of “The highest point of the building is 46.5 meters”

The “History” section needs more content added to it since it is only 3 sentences long. The “Description” section is very heavy with facts and could read smoother if it didn’t have such a dense amount of numerical statistics. Overall, the weakest part of the article currently are the sources. The entire article only has four sources. One source’s link no longer works and does not come from a reliable source to begin with. ( "Country Visits Unusual Places". Great American Country TV. Scripps Networks. LLC.:) Another source seems to be closely paraphrased. The source reads: “Many of the ancillary rooms are named after regions of China and decorated in the local style.” And the sentence in the article reads: “Each hall has the unique characteristics of the province and is furnished according to the local style.” This source has been too closely paraphrased and either needs to be quoted in stead or summarized. This source ( Great Hall of the People. Asian Historical Architecture - www.orientalarchitecture.com. Accessed 16 October 2007.) is also not cited in the correct place within the article. Content that could be added would be more information on the history of the building, inspirations from the architects and designers, planning that went into the creation of the building, and/or specific events that have been held at the building. In the talk page for the article, editors have discussed some of these ideas. They have also debated over the use of the word “volunteers” to describe the builders of the Great Hall. One believed that this was a misleading term since they believed the builders were actually slaves, however other editors pointed out that he did not have any reliable sources to back up that claim. People have also discussed how the tone of the article needs to read less like an advertisement of brochure.

The article could be improved by more sources that back up the facts already stated as well as new content in the subjects that lack much information.

Seanconnell (talk) 03:00, 29 January 2018 (UTC)