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Peer-review by Sidd
Summarized Comments on Article:


 * The intro paragraph is short and to the point, which is nice
 * I feel like the "Twitter" section can be expanded more
 * Cite the sources using the "cite" feature on Wikipedia
 * Instagram section is well written
 * "Facebook" section should be expanded more
 * Try to find some secondary sources that are not just blogs or news sources
 * All neutral language, good job
 * Overall, more information can be added to give more depth to the paragraphs.

Grammar Edits and More Comments

Originally, protests happened for multiple shootings across the nation, such as for the Charleston Shooting, but never reached past hundreds. With social media, more information was relayed to a larger audience in quicker time, giving more people awareness of what was happening across the nation. (1) By National Walkout Day on April 20, 2018, the social medias had followings over 1.3 million people and in Washington D.C. alone, 200,000 people attended the March For Our Lives protest, whom many younger adults attributed to the big social media presence. (2) The hashtag #MarchForOurLives was used 3.6 million times, and over 7.5 thousand tweets were directed at the NRA social media account.Notes: This is a good intro paragraph

Twitter

The March For Our Lives Twitter started in February of 2018, with the Twitter handle, @AMarch4OurLives. Up to date, the Twitter account has 450,000 followers and is a student-run organization with a large social media presence. (3) The March For Our Lives Twitter has real time, up to date tweets about the movement. It includes tweets about the red flag bill being signed in from other March For Our Lives accounts based in different locations, such as NYC. (4) In addition, the March For Our Lives Twitter account also alerts its followers about the events that are happening, such as meetings at Town Halls or when certain protests are happening. (5) All of their posts follow certain guidelines and relevance, and they also continue to retweet their own tweets too. Notes: I feel like more info can be added here.

Instagram

Celebrities and politicians have traditionally dominated policy discussion on social media. Selena Gomez, in March 2018 shared the march's hashtag #MarchForOurLives with the message: "Protect kids, not guns! and this post had received 2 millions likes.[1] Lady Gaga also documented the march releasing a series of Instagram videos calling for action from politicians to enforce stricter gun laws.[2] The march has drawn support from Taylor Swift, Miley Cyrus, Kim Kardashian, Ariana Grande, and their pledging to join and perform at the march.[3]

But following the Stoneman Douglas High School shooting, the students who survived and millions of students worldwide participated in March for Our Lives, emerging as more and more influential on Instagram and Twitter than celebrities on the gun control.[4] One of the tools they used was the hashtags. Top hashtag such as #MarchForOurLives #NeverAgain, #GunControlNow, and #EnoughIsEnough are used to spread out the word and call on public’s attention. [5] Besides, students collaborate with BBH L.A to create first Instagram coloring book. BBH L.A. executive creative director Zach Hilder said “We wanted to give them tools to elevate their voices, create a way to unify their message and allow everyone to participate in the march. That’s the inspiration for Color For Our Lives.”

Dr. Anatoliy Gruzd, James Lannigan, and Dr. Kevin Quigley in their study analyzed the cross-platform communication performed in civic organization, "‘informal’ narrative platform that promoted a clicktivist type of responses from the audience, whereas Twitter was a more ‘formal’ news platform that supported greater two-way communication between the organization and the audience". [6] #MarchforOurLives hashtag ignited much-needed America’s gun conversation, where people protesting against the epidemic of gun violence and the country needs to change.[7] Notes: The last sentence where you use "much needed" seems to show some bias

Facebook

The March For Our Lives movement employs Facebook as another social media platform to spread awareness of its campaigns and messages to people around the world. As of March 5th 2019, the MFOL Facebook page has garnered more than 300,000 followers.[1] The page is mainly used to provide updates on national policies regarding gun laws, as well as coverage of various politicians who advocate for more gun safety. Similar to other media platforms, the Facebook page frequently employs popular hashtags such as #MarchForOurLives and #NeverAgain in its posts. Although other social media platforms such as Twitter and Instagram often make posts to increase awareness, Facebook is more often used to organize people in nearby marches or demonstrations.[2] Notes: More info can be added here

Snapchat

The March For Our Lives movement leveraged Snapchat to gain momentum, spread the word and draw attention to what students and supporters were doing around the United States in response to recent shootings on school campuses. Unique from other social media platforms, Snapchat contains a map feature that allowed the world to see when and where activities by its users is taking place. This allowed the student walkouts to be easily tracked around the US.[1] Video shows thousands of students and supporters walking the streets, protesting gun violence and current gun laws. [2] Snapchat created a "March For Our Lives" Sticker that could be used by the platform's users to document the walkouts around the US. Good paragraph! Siddkumaran (talk) 03:14, 13 March 2019 (UTC)

Sean's Response to Sidd's Peer Review
Thanks for your feedback Sidd, we agree with much of what you wrote, and will work on them going forward, especially on expanding the content for those sections you mentioned. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Seanjaelee (talk • contribs) 04:08, 20 March 2019 (UTC)

Peer Review- Samir
Originally, protest happened for multiple shootings across the nation, such as for the Charleston Shooting, but never reached past hundreds. This sentence seems kind of abrupt., Not clear with what you are trying to say.With social media, more information was relayed to a larger audience in quicker time, giving more people awareness of what was happening across the nation. (1) By National Walkout Day on April 20, 2018, the social mediasSocial medias does not make sense had followings over 1.3 million people and in Washington D.C. alone, 200,000 people attended the March For Our Lives protest, whom many younger adults attributed to the big social media presence. (2) The hashtag #MarchForOurLives was used 3.6 million times, and over 7.5 thousand tweets were directed at the NRA social media account. Overall Decent Intro, but lacking clarity'''

Twitter

The March For Our Lives Twitter started in February of 2018, with the Twitter handle, @AMarch4OurLives. Up to date, the Twitter account has 450,000 followers and are a student-run organization with a large social media presence. (3) The March For Our Lives TwitterAccount has real time, up to date tweets about the movement. It includes tweets about the red flag bill being signed in from other March For Our Lives accounts based in different locations, such as NYC. This sentence above could be worded better.(4) In addition, the March For Our Lives Twitter account also alerts their followers about the events that are happening, such as meetings at Town Halls or when certain protests are happening. (5) All of their posts follow certain guidelines and relevance, and they also continue to retweet their own tweets too. The Last Two sentences seem kind of unnecessary, maybe talk about the effect of Twitter

Instagram

Celebrities and politicians have traditionally dominated policy discussion on social media. Selena Gomez, in March 2018 shared the march's hashtag #MarchForOurLives with the message: "Protect kids, not guns! and this post had received 2 millions likes.[1] Lady Gaga also documented the march releasing a series of Instagram videos calling for action from politicians to enforce stricter gun laws.[2] The march has drawn support from Taylor Swift, Miley Cyrus, Kim Kardashian, Ariana Grande, and their pledging to join and perform at the march.[3]

But following the Stoneman Douglas High School shooting, the students who survived and millions of students worldwide participated in March for Our Lives, emerging as more and more influential on Instagram and Twitter than celebrities on the gun control.[4] One of the tools they used was the hashtags. Top hashtag such as #MarchForOurLives #NeverAgain, #GunControlNow, and #EnoughIsEnough are used to spread out the word and call on public’s attention. [5] Besides, students collaborate with BBH L.A to create first Instagram coloring book. BBH L.A. executive creative director Zach Hilder said “We wanted to give them tools to elevate their voices, create a way to unify their message and allow everyone to participate in the march. That’s the inspiration for Color For Our Lives.”

Dr. Anatoliy Gruzd, James Lannigan, and Dr. Kevin Quigley in their study analyzed the cross-platform communication performed in civic organization, "‘informal’ narrative platform that promoted a clicktivist type of responses from the audience, whereas Twitter was a more ‘formal’ news platform that supported greater two-way communication between the organization and the audience". [6] #MarchforOurLives hashtag ignited much-needed America’s gun conversation, where people protesting against the epidemic of gun violence and the country needs to change.[7] I like this section a lot.

Facebook

The March For Our Lives movement employs Facebook as another social media platform to spread awareness of its campaigns and messages to people around the world. As of March 5th 2019, the MFOL Facebook page has garnered more than 300,000 followers.[1] The page is mainly used to provide updates on national policies regarding gun laws, as well as coverage of various politicians who advocate for more gun safety. Similar to other media platforms, the Facebook page frequently employs popular hashtags such as #MarchForOurLives and #NeverAgain in its posts. Although other social media platforms such as Twitter and Instagram often make posts to increase awareness, Facebook is more often used to organize people in nearby marches or demonstrations.[2]

Snapchat

The March For Our Lives movement leveraged Snapchat to gain momentum, spread the word and draw attention to what students and supporters were doing around the United States in response to recent shootings on school campuses. Unique from other social media platforms, Snapchat contains a map feature that allowed the world to see when and where activities by its users is taking place. This allowed the student walkouts to be easily tracked around the US.Don't define Snapchat[1] Video shows thousands of students and supporters walking the streets, protesting gun violence and current gun laws. [2] Snapchat created a "March For Our Lives" Sticker that could be used by the platform's users to document the walkouts around the US.

'''I have left some comments in-line, but overall I thought the article was okay, but stemmed away from the true purpose. This seemed to be more like the MoveMe assignment, and less factual. I do not think you need to go through every platform, but rather summarize this into 1-2 sections, and then address more parts of the movement. I also think that your wording is not clear at some points in the article. Overall though, it seems that you put a good amount of work into it, and will shape into a good article. '''

Peer review: Charlie Faramarzi
Feedback Besides some minor grammatical tweaks, the only thing that stood out to me was under instagram, saying "the country needs to change" is definitely an opinion. Perhaps it was suppsed to be part of the quote from the academic paper? Otherwise, I feel that phrase goes against Wikipedia's neutrality guidelines. Overall, great job!

Originally, protest happened for multiple shootings across the nation, such as for the Charleston Shooting, but attendance never exceeded a few hundred. With social media, more information was relayed to a larger audience in less time, giving more people awareness of what was happening across the nation. (1) By National Walkout Day on April 20, 2018, the social medias had followings over 1.3 million people and in Washington D.C. alone, 200,000 people attended the March For Our Lives protest, whom many younger adults attributed to the big social media presence. (2) The hashtag #MarchForOurLives was used 3.6 million times, and over 7.5 thousand tweets were directed at the NRA social media account.

Twitter

The March For Our Lives Twitter started in February of 2018, with the Twitter handle, @AMarch4OurLives. Up to date, the Twitter account has 450,000 followers and are a student-run organization with a large social media presence. (3) The March For Our Lives Twitter has real time, up to date tweets about the movement. It includes tweets about the red flag bill being signed in from other March For Our Lives accounts based in different locations, such as NYC. (4) In addition, the March For Our Lives Twitter account also alerts their followers about the events that are happening, such as meetings at Town Halls or when certain protests are happening. (5) All of their posts follow certain guidelines and relevance, and they also continue to retweet their own tweets too.

Instagram

Celebrities and politicians have traditionally dominated policy discussion on social media. Selena Gomez, in March 2018 shared the march's hashtag #MarchForOurLives with the message: "Protect kids, not guns! and this post had received 2 millions likes.[1] Lady Gaga also documented the march releasing a series of Instagram videos calling for action from politicians to enforce stricter gun laws.[2] The march has drawn support from Taylor Swift, Miley Cyrus, Kim Kardashian, Ariana Grande, and their pledging to join and perform at the march.[3]

But following the Stoneman Douglas High School shooting, the students who survived and millions of students worldwide participated in March for Our Lives, emerging as more and more influential on Instagram and Twitter than celebrities on the gun control.[4] One of the tools they used was the hashtags. Top hashtags such as #MarchForOurLives #NeverAgain, #GunControlNow, and #EnoughIsEnough are used to spread out the word and call on public’s attention. [5] Besides, students collaborate with BBH L.A to create first Instagram coloring book. BBH L.A. executive creative director Zach Hilder said “We wanted to give them tools to elevate their voices, create a way to unify their message and allow everyone to participate in the march. That’s the inspiration for Color For Our Lives.”

Dr. Anatoliy Gruzd, James Lannigan, and Dr. Kevin Quigley in their study analyzed the cross-platform communication performed in civic organization, "‘informal’ narrative platform that promoted a clicktivist type of responses from the audience, whereas Twitter was a more ‘formal’ news platform that supported greater two-way communication between the organization and the audience". [6] #MarchforOurLives hashtag <--- delete ignited America’s much-needed  gun conversation, where people protesting against the epidemic of gun violence and the country needs to change.[7] <>

Facebook

The March For Our Lives movement employs Facebook as another social media platform to spread awareness of its campaigns and messages to people around the world. As of March 5th 2019, the MFOL Facebook page has garnered more than 300,000 followers.[1] The page is mainly used to provide updates on national policies regarding gun laws, as well as coverage of various politicians who advocate for more gun safety. Similar to other media platforms, the Facebook page frequently employs popular hashtags such as #MarchForOurLives and #NeverAgain in its posts. Although other social media platforms such as Twitter and Instagram often make posts to increase awareness, Facebook is more often used to organize people in nearby marches or demonstrations.[2]

Snapchat

The March For Our Lives movement leveraged Snapchat to gain momentum, spread the word and draw attention to what students and supporters were doing around the United States in response to recent shootings on school campuses. Unique from other social media platforms, Snapchat contains a map feature that allowed the world to see when and where activities by its users is taking place. This allowed the student walkouts to be easily tracked around the US.[1] Video shows thousands of students and supporters walking the streets, protesting gun violence and current gun laws. [2] Snapchat created a "March For Our Lives" Sticker that could be used by the platform's users to document the walkouts around the US. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Cfaramarzi (talk • contribs) 05:50, 13 March 2019 (UTC)

Peer Review: Mark Palmer
Hi, great research and article contributions you all are working on. Here are some edits that might make the reader more comfortable while digesting your information -Firstly, your sections explaining the movement's facebook and snapchat opening sentences seem very essay like. I dont believe they have a place on wikipedia, even though they are both great introductions into what you are trying to explain. "The March For Our Lives movement employs Facebook as another social media platform to spread awareness of its campaigns and messages to people around the world." and "The March For Our Lives movement leveraged Snapchat to gain momentum, spread the word and draw attention to what students and supporters were doing around the United States in response to recent shootings on school campuses." These two sentences are those that I would consider deleting. - The paragraph about the cross-platform communication study is very interesting and I can tell you all did a lot of research on it, but I don't know how it ties into the rest of the section - MarchforOurLives hashtag ignited much-needed America’s gun conversation, where people protesting against the epidemic of gun violence and the country needs to change.[7] --> I would consider editing/deleting this sentence, as it has a lot of bias rooted in it. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Mpalm123 (talk • contribs) 22:37, 7 April 2019 (UTC)