User talk:Sebastian55tang/sandbox

Sebastian's peer review notes by Te'ave: - add a history section? where does Biochemical Engineering originate? - Try adding visuals for the applications section - Where can you earn a degree in Biochemical Engineering? - Good use of words that are easy t understand for the general population

Peer review by Aubrey
Hey Sebastian! Great start on your article so far. I really like the sentence you added to the lead paragraph! It helps show why this topic is important and applicable. I think the first sentence of the lead paragraph could use some editing. The sentence structure is odd and the idea didn’t come across as clearly as it could. I also think it could be helpful to add more links to other Wikipedia pages, for example “unit processes” in the first sentence, because the average reader may not know what that means.

I like that you have an applications section with subsections that will explore different industries that utilize biochemical engineering. I would reorganize the “See Also” section because there is no context and all different types of subjects are intermixed. I would break it down into subsections, such as “types of bioreactors”, and then maybe give a short sentence briefly describing each subject. Then, when readers look at this section, they could get a faster and clearer idea of what these related topics are.

An idea for another section to add to your article is a history section covering the beginning of this field and mentioning the different university degree programs available. This would help readers get a better feel for how new of a field this is and how they can learn more about it if they are interested.

You have done a good job so far of keeping a neutral tone throughout the article. You’ve also done a good job so far of citing all of your statements with reliable sources. I like that this article is on track to give a good, broad overview of all the different applications of biochemical engineering. Great job so far, and keep up the good work! Aubrey29 (talk) 04:59, 16 February 2019 (UTC)