User talk:Seda1900/sandbox

Seda, good job with this section so far. I only have a few preliminary remarks:

- Regarding the introductory part, I think this complements very well what I have.

- With regard to the sub-section on children, it is short, but I think you have managed to be pretty concise. I have a few suggestions regarding grammar, which I will send you. Also, I am not sure, but I do not think you need a comma between the reference numbers.

Vic.nor (talk) 14:28, 29 November 2013 (UTC)

Thanks for your comments!

- The reason why it's quite short is because there is an extensive article on wikipedia already on child sexual abuse, to which I am linking at the top.

- Yeah, if you happen to have some suggestions regarding the grammar (I guess you remember the parts I was hesitant about from our previous email conversation)

Seda1900 (talk) 00:34, 30 November 2013 (UTC)

Seda, very interesting article! I think you don't need to put too much content into the children's chapter, if there exists already another wiki article. But I would rather focus, as you did, on the feminism chapter. There I'm not sure if you should mention the books' titles and authors explicitly. It sounds a little bit like a literature review listing the books. I would maybe focus a little more on their arguments and connect them with each other and then just cite the authors.Ginme (talk) 14:09, 1 December 2013 (UTC)

Good idea, thanks! Seda1900 (talk) 21:13, 1 December 2013 (UTC)

Seda,

I have sent you an email with some suggestions regarding grammar.

With regard to the section on feminism, very interesting. I think I agree with Gina though, that it may seem a bit like a literature review. Could the titles be put in a footnote? Or in brackets in the text? (I'd prefer footnotes)

I was also wondering if the WHO study you refer to is the same as the Report on Health and Violence? If not, I think it could be put as an external link in the "External link" section. Vic.nor (talk) 08:55, 2 December 2013 (UTC)

Seda,

Great job with your section! I am happy we decided to add a part on feminist views, this complements very well the topic. I think we have a solid article in terms of content. I don't have any comments for the moment, but only one question: in your references, you have put notes, which goes beyond my wikipedia skills for the moment. I would be happy if you could help me on saturday for this. CarolineRoy22 (talk) 10:16, 2 December 2013 (UTC)

Thank you for all of your comments and encouragement! Vic, it is the the WHO multi-country study on women's health and domestic violence. Seda1900 (talk) 12:45, 4 December 2013 (UTC)

Hey Seda,

Great job indeed! Just one remark about the Domestic sexual violence part which I think should be removed from Victims, and placed above, as domestic sexual violence is already mentioned in 'Conflict-related and domestic sexual violence'. Maybe you can incorporate your part in there.Nelipeuch (talk) 04:49, 12 December 2013 (UTC)