User talk:Sejone13/sandbox

Peer review:

I thought the article was very informative. It presented information about the Institute in a very concise and clear way. I really liked the quick but detailed summaries of the results of the different studies done by the Institute. A few of the sentences were a little awkward in the introduction. I think it might also be interesting to include the statistics for for multiple years of the study regarding the percentage of women in the film industry behind the camera. I think that expanding more on the different studies, such as how they got to the conclusion of gender roles being stereotyped in pop culture. I also think it would be helpful to expand on the notable accomplishments received by the institute. Overall, once you add everything you are planning and have written, it will greatly improve the information on the page that already exists and will make it a much more informative page.

Zcrow16 (talk) 01:40, 6 March 2017 (UTC)

Dr. Dove's response:

Sofia, I think this looks good for start, but it may be helpful to flesh out your article I bit more with further detail and to try to find a few more sources of information. I'm sure that there have been many reports and articles written about the Institute, so that would be a place to start. Is there any way you can gauge impact of the Institute, as that might be a good heading to add. Adovevie (talk) 19:53, 13 March 2017 (UTC)