User talk:SeltzerWater99/Impact of the COVID-19 pandemic on people with disabilities

for Adam Heading Style/Tone "many westernized countries", "myriad reasons" Sources Misc For Bella
 * consider revising your first heading to both be more concise and to more specifically speak to concerns about access/inequity?
 * It may be useful to be more specific with your language in some instances ---
 * "This has culminated with disabled people being more willing to be vaccinated than those without disabilities, but, nonetheless, being vaccinated at lower rates" is a bit vague as well, so change "this" to something that is clear and specific and consider flipping the order of the sentence, so talk about lower rates first and then willingness, perhaps.
 * Sources seem good and solid, though I'd bet you could find more sources than the australian one citing concern... you can draw on journalistic sources such as NYT for instance, since you're citing a concern rather than a medical "fact" -- this source https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=UjlbpykZ2xw can lead you to the one I am thinking of, I believe!
 * comma after "obstacles"; change "regards" to "regard"; add "as to" before "why" in "reasons why";
 * -specify "disabled students" in your first sentence.
 * -otherwise not too much to comment on here -- but with regard to how it will fit into the article you'll want to create sub-headings in the education section in order to differentiate the pros/cons/return to in person concerns
 * All in all I'm really proud of these additions and I think they're important!! --Liliput000 (talk) 18:44, 26 April 2022 (UTC)