User talk:SephirothXKH/sandbox

You've done a really good job managing your information and providing a lot of statistics and citations to make your statements more powerful and factual. I know absolutely nothing about Chinatown other than the dominating culture that lives there but I learned a lot from the information you provided here. Gentrification is a huge problems worldwide but I didn't realize how much of an issue it was here. It is absurd that if people want to fix their houses up or change things to make it the way they want then the prices get jacked up to live there. Like you said, this leaves to a lot of people and families homeless which is extremely unfair. And it was really surprising how unsanitary it is to live here. Granted their is trash everywhere you go, one of the major things you mentioned that they are trying to change in Chinatown is the elimination of trash on their streets. If this is an issue that they are seriously concerned about then it has to be bad. It is so depressing that people live like this. I had no idea that Mayor Menino provided a new day care center, community room, classrooms, and office space to Chinatown and had done it through BRA. It must be amazing for the families living there to see these drastic changes to help them live a better lifestyle and it is nice to see people helping to fix it. Like you mentioned there a lot of changes in the process of being made to help make Chinatown less gentrified and more affordable for people to live a comfortable life. It is nice learning about new places that surround where we live today and what is going on and the changes that are being made to make it better. Shows how the world is chaining, in a more positive way, and how we're trying to create a society that is suitable for all people to live in. Good job! Kcabral18 (talk) 00:10, 28 March 2015 (UTC)

Chinatown
Hi, I'm providing some support for your class and I have a few comments on your draft additions: I think if you take a close eye to your draft as well as what is in the article already this should be a nice improvement. Let me know if you need any help or have any questions. Adam (Wiki Ed) (talk) 19:11, 7 April 2015 (UTC)
 * I think the intro section could be improved a bit. You've added in demographics to the article, we should include the most important ones in the intro when writing our summary. We speak broadly about the high asian american population, but don't ever say about how many people live in Chinatown. Think also about using the intro to summarize all of the article, as well.
 * Try linking to other articles to give the reader some context. See how the current article links to get a sense of what a role links should play in your edits. They're helpful! For example, "The ACDC was established in 1987 and since then has worked on housing development, including the 2002 notable "big dig" construction to gain back a piece of land lost due to urban renewal called the Parcel 24." This could link to Big Dig (and drop the modifier "notable").
 * I would recommend breaking up your demographics and community resources section into 2 paragraphs a piece. I would also recommend removing some of the detail in both sections. I don't know if listing the growth rates from 2000-2010 for various demographics is all that helpful to a reader. The same may be true for the detail in the community section. How important is "In the year 2014 The Boston foundation donated nearly 500,000 to many supports in the Boston Area."?