User talk:SeraphAngel

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Hello, SeraphAngel, and welcome to Wikipedia! Thank you for your contributions. I hope you like the place and decide to stay. Unfortunately, your edit to Death of Freddie Gray does not conform to Wikipedia's Neutral Point of View policy (NPOV). Wikipedia articles should refer only to facts and interpretations that have been stated in print or on reputable websites or other forms of media.

There's a page about the NPOV policy that has tips on how to effectively write about disparate points of view without compromising the NPOV status of the article as a whole. If you are stuck, and looking for help, please come to the New contributors' help page, where experienced Wikipedians can answer any queries you have! Or, to ask for help on your talk page, and a volunteer should respond shortly. Below are a few other good links for newcomers: I hope you enjoy editing here and being a Wikipedian! Please sign your name on talk pages using four tildes ( ~ ); this will automatically produce your name and the date. If you have any questions, check out Questions or ask me on my talk page. Again, welcome! Grand&#39;mere Eugene (talk) 16:52, 7 November 2017 (UTC)
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Hello, and thank you for taking the time to reach out to me. As you noted, this is my first time in editing a Wiki article and I do want to get it right. What is the best way to proceed? Should I re-draft and try posting again? Or is there a better route?

Once again, thank you for your time.

SeraphAngel (talk) 18:10, 7 November 2017 (UTC)


 * I'm glad you asked! The first requirement is to use reliable secondary sources describing the podcast in neutral terms, summarizing the sources. It's okay to link to the primary source, as you did after the first sentence, but the rest of the summary should reference what other unrelated (secondary) reliable sources say. For exmple, AOL published this summary/analysis that makes the point Undisclosed is not another crime drama, but one from "the legal side of crime". Phrases like "its scope was wide-ranging" must be cited to reliable secondary sources, or they are considered "puffery". In other words, any analysis must be cited to a reputable source, not language that appears to be advertising. In discussing the knife, your statement, "the incorrect statement by police that Freddie Gray was carrying an illegal knife" could have been more neutrally presented if you had left out the jnon-neutral word "incorrect"(see WP:NPOV).
 * Encyclopedic language needs to be neutral and preferably dull as dirt. Instead of completely re-drafting, just apply the Wikipedia filters related to neutral language, and use at least one source that is not published by undisclosed.com. Let me know if you need additional help. Cheers! —Grand&#39;mere Eugene (talk) 20:12, 7 November 2017 (UTC)