User talk:Seth castillo/sandbox

draft review
. I have a few suggestions for this draft replacement of Street fashion I think with some of these suggestions implemented the article could be great. Let me know if you need any help with these suggestions. Thanks. Adam (Wiki Ed) (talk) 18:11, 27 October 2014 (UTC)
 * Overall this has the potential to be a big improvement over the current article. Already it's much better sourced and the content is obviously improved.
 * I will say that the tone of the article may not quite be right for an encyclopedia. Addressing the reader ("The clothes you wear make a statement...") or statements like "Most people outside of this culture attach a stigma of being a superficial and selfish culture that is pointless." in the voice of the encyclopedia can cause some problems for an article. You've already got some great sources and information on the concept and influences of street fashion. Think of what a reader would want to know about "street fashion" when they land on your article. If you stick to serving a reader who wants a general overview of a topic you'll have a lot of success.
 * We dodge a bit around defining street fashion and separating it from culture. I agree that the two are intertwined (and your sources support this), but let's forget to offer something akin to the definition in the current article.