User talk:Settingitgaylyright

Joanne Vannicola
Just a few notes for you about your recent edits to Joanne Vannicola: I've made some changes to the article accordingly, rewriting the content more neutrally and adding some of the kind of referencing we actually require. Thanks. Bearcat (talk) 19:49, 18 April 2018 (UTC)
 * 1) Firstly, we have to use a more formal writing style here, not the kind of casual writing style that might be seen on her own website about herself or her biographical sketch on IMDb. In encyclopedic writing, a person is referred to by their WP:LASTNAME, not their first. That is, once you've given her full name in the introduction, for the entire rest of the body text you use either Vannicola or the appropriate gender pronouns — the only time "Joanne" can be used again is if there's somebody else whose surname is also Vannicola being referred to nearby in the same sentence, so that it would be ambiguous which person the surname was actually referring to. Outside of that specific situation, however, we write either that "Vannicola" did something or that "she" did something, not that "Joanne" did.
 * 2) Secondly, we also have to maintain a neutral tone, not a public relations tone. So we don't include subjective language like what she's "dedicated" to or "passionate" about — we simply describe her actions, and don't express value judgements about her motivations.
 * 3) Thirdly, the "references" you added were not reliable sources for the purposes of referencing a Wikipedia article — we have to reference our content primarily to real daily newspapers and widely distributed magazines and books, not just to WP:BLOGS or limited-circulation free bar rags like The Buzz. (We can use sources like The Buzz or AfterEllen sparingly for additional content after there's enough of the higher-quality referencing present to cover off the bulk of the content, but they can't be an article's only sources.) And references are added by nesting the link (and full citation details, i.e. the actual title of an article and the name of the publication and the date on which they published it, not just the descriptor "News article in [Publication]") inside tags, not just by throwing the URL directly into the article body.