User talk:Sgallo02

I enjoyed reading your wiki article rough draft on Ohtahara syndrome (OS). I thought your abstract covered all the key features/ characteristics of the disease and the definition of the disease. Your signs and symptoms were clear, concise, and straight to the point. Although no single cause of OS has been identified, I like how you listed a number of gene mutations in your “cause” section, in addition to the molecular mechanism. I thought both of those components were pertinent, useful, and important in understanding the development of OS. Overall, I throughly enjoyed reading about Ohtahara syndrome. I think that adding more information (if possible) about the diagnosis of OS would be beneficial to the overall understanding of how to distinguish if a patient is experiencing OS or not. Also, I don’t think the title “presentation” is necessary unless it is a previously existing title from another wiki article. The information under the presentation section could probably merge with the abstract. (Just a thought) Overall, you did an excellent job! I look forward to reading your final draft. 144.74.7.49 (talk) 20:07, 15 November 2019 (UTC)