User talk:Sgallo02/sandbox

It seems like you have a good start for several of the categories - they just need some filling out! Obviously, I haven’t researched the disease you are working on, but I’ll include a few general comments and questions that might be helpful as you continue to work on this page. For the abstract it may be helpful to look at the abstracts of other kinds of Epilepsy Wikipedia pages to see how they are structured, as I would imagine they would have some similarities in common with this form of epilepsy. For the cause, if there is not a single known cause of abdominal epilepsy, are there a few possibilities being considered that you could outline? Does research suggest that one thing is causing the seizures and another thing is causing the abdominal pain? Or does it suggest that they are linked? What part of the brain is being affected, and is it linked at all to the abdomen? For the mechanism, even if you don’t know the details of how this exact form of epilepsy is happening, could you fill in some general mechanisms of how epilepsy or seizures work? The diagnosis is looking good. It’s great that you explain that criteria that are considered when diagnosing abdominal epilepsy. For the treatment, I see that you have explained one type of anticonvulsant drug (phenytoin) that is used for treatment of this disorder. Are there other drugs or alternative therapies that have been tried on this type of epilepsy? Don’t forget to include sections on “prognosis,” “epidemiology,” and “research.” --SannSK (talk) 21:33, 10 November 2019 (UTC)

--Sweiner02 (talk) 18:43, 30 November 2019 (UTC)
 * Remove the subject and abstract headings from the top.
 * Abstract needs to be written in paragraph form. You should just take what's on the current page and work from there. Don't remove stuff from the previous work without a good reason.
 * In general, you have rewritten stuff that was fine on the original. Don't do that. Use what's already there and modify from that point. Do not start over. I would copy this text somewhere else, reload the original source and then add things back in from there.
 * while the mechanism is unknown, there are proposed possibilities. Discuss what is out there!
 * Make sure you add recent research, because it does exist!
 * Needs lots of links to the rest of wikipedia.

Article Review
I like how you have noted to include an image of AE, figures and diagrams can make be very informative and help the reader. I like to do the abstract last, and I assume that is what you are doing as well. I find it easier to summarize once the article is complete and all points are mapped out. It is interesting how it is not know if the abdominal pains cause the seizures, or if they are a result of the seizures. That makes determining a mechanism difficult, since there is not enough information. I like the diagnosis section: clear and concise. The only grammar issue is capitalization of the third sentence in the treatment section. But this a great start to work off. --Hganev (talk) 17:29, 13 November 2019 (UTC)