User talk:Sgilyard/sandbox

I enjoyed reading this article and was interesting. The improvements can be made by adding more related wiki article links and genetics section. History section could be moved to the abstract as an opening statement and addition of recent research would be helpful.

-nakyo heo

Your Wiki article is so far pretty well put together. You have alot of resources, and good links to other pages. You are missing some links in the diagnosis section. Overall, the sections dont seem to feel in order. It feels like it jumps a bit. For example, Lafora bodies could be near the top near the mechanisms area. You are missing the causes and prevention section, and Treatment section. Also if able to add alittle more content in a few of the sections would make it feel more even. Such as the symptoms, and recent research.

Anthony.nour (talk) 03:13, 14 November 2017 (UTC)

I enjoyed reading the information in this article. You have a great foundation laid out. Some improvements can be made by adding the history to the abstract and adding recent research, giving a brief description of the symptoms as well as possibly making a bullet point list for easier reading, and making sure to cite your sources, especially in the genetics and epidemiology section. Be cautious of grammar. There were times when the sentences lacked commas, or the sentence was a run-on. For the Pathophysiology section, if possible, maybe try to make it more lay readable. I felt slightly overwhelmed while reading it. Also, you seemed to be missing a prevention section. Lastly for diagnosis, if possible, try to incorporate an image of the EEG for this disease since it is significant in its diagnosis. - Jasmine Crank — Preceding unsigned comment added by Jcrank07 (talk • contribs) 12:59, 16 November 2017 (UTC)

Sweiner02 (talk) 18:39, 22 November 2017 (UTC)
 * No reason to mention gender in abstract if it's not relevant. Keep focused.
 * Nice, clear abstract.
 * Signs and symptoms needs more detail.
 * Needs a better explanation of what Lafora bodies are. You talk about how they come about, but don't have a simple definition. Especially needed in abstract.
 * Needs a lot more citations. Once you've done that, take out the note about lacking citations.
 * What causes a doctor to take these steps for diagnosis? Flesh this out.
 * You listed a bunch of treatments and said there's no treatment. I think you mean there's no cure. Also, this should be treatment and prognosis, since you do discuss both.
 * Recent research is missing.