User talk:Sgrey188/sandbox

You may want to add a citation for the second paragraph in the 'background' section.

This sounds a little awkward, try adding in for/for up to between desegregation and 30 months: "which denied the Arkansas School Board the right to delay desegregation 30 months[1]." — Preceding unsigned comment added by Obrienemilyh (talk • contribs) 15:27, 28 November 2018 (UTC)

In the first sentence, I would add the word "by" before "30 months." Paigemorse (talk) 15:46, 28 November 2018 (UTC)

"The relief the plaintiffs requested was for the African-American children to be returned to segregated schools and for the implementation of the desegregation plan to be postponed for two and a half years (30 months)" I don't think you need to have "(30 months)" in this sentence since you already said it at the very beginning of the article. Paigemorse (talk) 15:49, 28 November 2018 (UTC)

Who is on the side of Cooper and who is on the side of Aaron? I would state which side is representing Arkansas School District and who the other side is representing. Paigemorse (talk) 15:53, 28 November 2018 (UTC)

"Segregation supporters argued that the states have the power to nullify federal laws or court rulings that they believe to be unconstitutional and the states could use this power to nullify the Brown decision." Can you add an internal link for "nullify"? Paigemorse (talk) 15:55, 28 November 2018 (UTC)

"Even though education is the responsibility of the state government, that responsibility must be carried out in a manner consistent with the requirements of the Constitution, particularly the Fourteenth Amendment." Remove the internal link in "Fourteenth amendment." You already linked it earlier. Paigemorse (talk) 15:56, 28 November 2018 (UTC)

Wording
Seems like there might be something missing in this phrase. Consider revising (for 30 months): to delay desegregation 30 months Ccharliefk (talk) 15:33, 28 November 2018 (UTC)

"The district court granted the school board's request, but the United States Court of Appeals for the Eighth Circuit reversed." This wording is odd. I would say "reversed the decision." Paigemorse (talk) 15:50, 28 November 2018 (UTC)

The "Court's Decision" section requires more sources to use. However, if you include only one source, don't forget to cite it at the end of the paragraph, "Even though education is the responsibility of the state government, that responsibility must be carried out in a manner consistent with the requirements of the Constitution, particularly the Fourteenth Amendment." Jmiragha (talk) 15:52, 28 November 2018 (UTC)

The "Critical Response" section requires citation at the end of the paragraph. Jmiragha (talk) 15:55, 28 November 2018 (UTC)