User talk:Shaira2/sandbox

= Peer Assessment =

Laura, Fall 2018

Hi Shaira,

Your sandbox is amazingly organized and clear. I understand the research you are doing, what you hope to contribute to the pages, and the sources that you have gained your information from. Your "Summarizing and Synthesizing" is fantastic as well! My first reaction to the "contents" tab at the beginning of the page was that it seems crowded and overwhelming in case you want to re-format headings, but if it works for you, then that's definitely great!

Input by Christian
You have an awesome amount of info already! Maybe you can have a section that provides an overview comparison of the health disparities between rural and urban areas. Also, I don't think your "Water Supply and Sanitation" section is needed, since that's more of a possible cause of health issues rather than a specific subsection of health issues. Maybe instead, you can have "Environmental Health Issues" section that includes issues such as water quality, pollution, and environmental.

For your Family Planning section, maybe you can include the controversy over the Reproductive Health Bill, especially within the context of Catholicism within the Philippines.

Kuyachris (talk) 03:20, 17 March 2018 (UTC)

Input by Pallavi
The structure and your different sections look really good, and you have a great encyclopedic tone. Maybe go a little bit farther in explaining the "why" and "how" behind your statistics if that information is available. For the family planning article maybe you can add abortion (or talk about the debate around it).

--Ppanyam (talk) 04:10, 21 March 2018 (UTC)

Input by Gabriella
I am impressed with the breadth of content you've found to add to your Area article. I see that the current Health in the Philippines article is somewhat bare; your contributions will truly add such value to the current Wikipedia article. I truly appreciate the structure you will add to the article as well as the intentional addition of Reproductive and Mental Health sections; topics often ignored or glossed over in discussions of health. I also find that the Family Planning article will experience quite the boost with the information you plan to add. Not only do I see how all your information clearly belongs and adds substance to each of your articles, but the clarity with which you are presenting the information is extremely helpful for any and all future readers. Your Area article is very clearly organized in all the sections you plan to add, and your Sector article will benefit from the clear and concise layout of the information you hope to add. Your sources appear reliable and I believe your presentation of the material is neutral and ready for publishing!! Gabbyblandino (talk) 23:06, 8 November 2018 (UTC)gabbyblandino