User talk:Shannadew/sandbox

You packed a lot of information in there. I made a few editing changes for readability and for typos. Other than that, I think you've done a great job at getting a start there. I would be curious to see if there is anything in the 50's that can be added to the timeline. Dgloclou (talk) 18:12, 4 June 2012 (UTC)

I have a few suggestions for re-organizing this, Shanna.

First, though, I really like the first headline/topic, Defining Feminism in a Thai Context. I think that is a good preface for everything else, given that this is the English version of Wikipedia, and that you are writing as someone outside of that Thai context (at least for a few more months . . . ).

Thai women's movement history also makes sense as a major subcategory. However, abortion, sexuality, theory, activism and movements, all seem like subtopics of either women's movement or feminism. Women's Studies academic degrees is, at this point, a separate category, as is the first woman prime minister--unless she has ties to that history of the women's movement in Thailand.

Also, you'll need to provide complete citation information for your references. I assume that you know this and it's just that the page is in draft status, but I couldn't stop myself from adding that. :-) WGST490 (talk) 01:18, 26 May 2012 (UTC)

Hmm. Still no comments from anyone else here?!!?!

Rather than revise your work, I'm pasting the first paragraph here, and inserting some suggestions and changes. I'll try to make obvious what's new and different.

Feminism (นิสัยผู้หญิง)[1] in Thailand is perpetuated by many of the same traditional feminist theory foundations,the same as what? though Thai (คนไทย) [2] feminism (สตรีนิยม) is facilitated through a medium of social movement activist groups within Thailand’s illiberal democracy. The Thai state claims to function as a civil society with an intersectionality between gender inequality and activism in its political spheres what, exactly, does this phrase mean?. In the Thai state, feminist activism is pivotal upon determined by class structures. which focus on specific facets of public policy based on a woman’s socioeconomic status. The hierarchy of a feminist's issue lays in one's class social strata. The Thai elite focusing on public policy, social equality, and increase in women’s presence within economic roles confines. The younger Thai generation is depicted Why depicted, while the other groups just are? as less concerned with their public policy and formal politics; while middle-class feminist Thai women express their political concerns through more antiquated problematic word choice and traditional mediums such as artistic performances and published works. [3]

WGST490 (talk) 15:33, 3 June 2012 (UTC)