User talk:ShannonDaley

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Hello, ShannonDaley, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Ian and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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Feedback
Some feedback on your draft Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 17:12, 28 November 2017 (UTC)
 * It looks like you copied text from the sport dog nutrition article without clicking "edit" first. As a result, some of your references are messed up. You'll need to go through your draft carefully and fix the ones that take you back to the sport dog article. For example, in the Fibre section there are some references that look like [11] instead of [11] - those need to be fixed.
 * Your work needs copy-editing. There are missing spaces between sentences. The article mixes American and English spelling (e.g., "fiber" and "fibre").
 * References go after punctuation, not before.
 * You need to include links to other articles. Any term that is likely to be unfamiliar to the average reader should be linked the first time it appears in the article.
 * References should appear immediately after the statements they support. There should be a minimum of one reference per paragraph, and there shouldn’t be any text after the last reference in a paragraph. There are entire paragraphs with no supporting references.
 * You need to make sure that all the information is specific to sport dogs. General information about the nutritional requirements of all dogs should be elsewhere - maybe in the dog food article.

thank you
thank you Ian we will work on those updates. I am unclear on what you mean from the last point you made about requirements of 'all dogs should be elsewhere'? is there a specific point you are talking about? Also for the finer spelling should we be using the English or the American way? Also we are a little unsure if we need to have the parts in our sandbox page that are on the original page that we have not edited or do not plan to edit? thank you for your help it is greatly appreciated ShannonDaley (talk) 16:17, 29 November 2017 (UTC)


 * When you're writing about things that are true for all dogs, just reference the dog article. In the info isn't there already, add it to the dog article. For example


 * The part I italicised there isn't about sport dogs, it's about all dogs. But since you're just making a comparison, it's probably fine.

Here the part I italicised is less necessary to understand your specific points. Leave out the work "However" and the rest stands alone pretty well. But if the first part isn't there already, you might want to add it to the dog article.


 * The fat section, on the other hand, is a lot more general.


 * Here you can move quite a bit of info to the dog article (where it would be seen by a lot more people) and not lose anything critical to this article (because readers who want to know more can refer to the dog article).


 * Use whatever spelling is currently used in the article. If it uses American spelling, stick with that. If it uses English/Canadian spelling, stick with that. Be consistent.


 * Don't worry about what's currently in your sandbox or isn't. Just make sure that when you merge your changes into the original article, that you do it in small chunks, and that you use edit summaries to explain what you're up to. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 21:58, 1 December 2017 (UTC)