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Peer Review - Kyle Pugh — Preceding unsigned comment added by KylePugh (talk • contribs) 23:52, 14 February 2018 (UTC)

A good start on the background of Hargrave; the biographical nature of your draft builds well on what is missing in the published article. The tone of the article is fairly unbiased and "encyclopedic." However, both your draft and the article talk about the importance of the letters but neither have yet to really touch on what is contained within them and what it reveals about the life of early settlers in the west. Trent's library does have copies of her letters in its Special Collections. I would recommend contacting Jodi in Archives to make an appointment to view them. I do love how you have bolded certain points to show that they will be hyperlinked in the completed article. One question, though: the article says they were married in 1840, but your draft says 1839. I am intrigued to know which date is accurate. Also, you write that "Letitia would develop a long-term friendship with Simpson’s wife and sister-in-law-Frances and Isobel, respectively." There is an extra hyphen there that, while grammatically O.K., it is slightly confusing because it seems like it is linked to sister-in-law.

Peer Review GeorginaLW (talk) 05:27, 17 February 2018 (UTC)

Hi, I think that your article is coming along well! Your information is well thought out and free of bias. I'm curious to see what headings you will create for your article. Will all the information written down so far be included in the bibliography section or will you divide some of it into different sections? It is interesting to hear that most information on Letitia is preserved through letters, and it would be great if you could access them and use them as primary documents in your article. It would be helpful to cite and include the sources that you have used so far in your research. This soounds like a really interesting topic and maybe one that has not been explored much, so this is a great start!

Peer Review
This is a good start to the assignment. I like how you included information regarding why she is significant and what she did to further our understanding of the lives of white women living in Ruperts Land during this time period. The lead is well written and provides detail regarding what is to come in the article. The content of the article is clearly unbiased, leading to an accurate representation of the information. It would have been nice to see the sources that you plan to use in the article to see where your information is coming from. The article could have been improved by providing more information about Letitia MacTavish Hargrave life in Western Canada, specifically why she is considered an important historical figure. Also, it would be interesting to read more about her personal life, specifically her children. Overall, this is a great start to the assignment. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Jessica Parsons97 (talk • contribs) 23:14, 15 February 2018 (UTC)