User talk:Shaywah/sandbox

=Evaluations=

Spelling/Grammar
Looks good, but I would probably replace the word 'This' at the beginning of two of your sentences with the subject in question, or I would make them a continuation of the previous sentences. For example, when you said "Catholic priest Martin Luther considered this a heinous crime, and used the Gutenberg press to produce his 95 theses on a church in Wittenberg, Germany on October 31, 1517, appealing this practice. This soon led to the Reformation."; I might have either put it as "Catholic priest Martin Luther considered this a heinous crime, and used the Gutenberg press to produce his 95 theses on a church in Wittenberg, Germany on October 31, 1517, appealing this practice, which soon led to the Reformation.", or made a new sentence saying something like "The 95 theses written by Martin Luther eventually lead to the Reformation." Other than that, I think everything looks great. Paul E. Hubbard (talk) 01:41, 30 January 2018 (UTC)

Language
Looks great! Paul E. Hubbard (talk) 01:12, 30 January 2018 (UTC)

Organization
Looks great! Paul E. Hubbard (talk) 01:12, 30 January 2018 (UTC)

Coding
Everything looks good, but I would probably add a link to some more of the people and things mentioned, such as Martin Luther, the Incunabula period and the Gutenberg Press, so that people can do further reading into the subject. Paul E. Hubbard (talk) 01:23, 30 January 2018 (UTC)

Validity
Everything looks valid to me Paul E. Hubbard (talk) 01:24, 30 January 2018 (UTC)

Completion
Looks complete to me. Paul E. Hubbard (talk) 01:26, 30 January 2018 (UTC)

Relevance
Looks great I can't believe that no one had mentioned this before now. Paul E. Hubbard (talk) 01:27, 30 January 2018 (UTC)

1/29/2018 Evaluation by caleb26
Good job. Keep up the good work. I can’t wait to see what other topics you touch on.
 * Points: 39/40
 * Grade: 98%

Spelling/Grammar
Meets standard I would recommend looking at the grammar and punctuation of the sentence that starts with, “Once printing was…” You might consider breaking the sentence into two sentences.

Language
Meets standard There does not appear to be any issues with tone. On another note, it might be a good idea to have more consistency in the list of mostly countries that appears in the final sentence.

Organization
Meets standard. The part that references art could possibly be separate from the part that addresses the printing press and Martin Luther.

Coding
Meets standard. I do not see any errors in coding.

Validity
Meets standard. The information seems valid based upon a short search of basic facts. It may be advisable to acquire additional citations that are from peer review sources.

Completion
Nearly meets standard. The length of the article certainly meets the requirements of the assignment. However, the article does not appear to have any citations from peer reviewed sources.

Relevance
Meets standard. The starting art sentences feels relevant. I just feel as if it should be expanded. The printing press part and the connection with Martin Luther seems very important.

1/29/2018 Evaluation by Bportis
Great addition to the Nuremberg page!
 * Grade: 'A'

Spelling/Grammar
Meets standard Overall very good, I would attach some of these sentences together such as "Prior to this, it became the place where movable type was first used successfully and it was also the birthplace of the Gutenberg Press in 1450’s. [2] This was the brainchild of Johannes Gutenberg. [2]". I would suggest changing this to something like " Prior to this, it became the place where movable type was first used successfully and it was also the birthplace of the Gutenberg Press in 1450’s, [2] which was the brainchild of Johannes Gutenberg. [2]"

Language
Exceeds standard Good use of a neutral language and no contractions.

Organization
Meets standard. Everything looks good, just need a heading.

Coding
Meets standard. Could add some links to the Wikipedia page for things like "Martin Luther".

Validity
Meets standard. Everything looks great. Solid information.

Completion
Meets standard. It's almost there with just a little touching up to do.

Relevance
Meets standard. No irrelevant content. Looks like a great addition to the Nuremberg page.

02/23/2018 Evaluation by caleb26
caleb26 (talk) 12:58, 24 February 2018 (UTC)
 * Points: 38.5/40
 * Grade: 96%

Spelling/Grammar
Nearly Meets Standard There are just a few sentences that could be checked for grammar or typos: 2,4, and 8. For the second you would probably want to say: "It is considered to be one of the top two most discussed topics in the country." If you want to maintain the current style I would simply suggest removing the "most". For the fourth sentence I would just change "requires" to "requirements". For the eighth sentence I would simply remove "the" from before "...World War II..."

Language
Meets Standard There are a few areas that have contractions which should be changed.

Organization
Meets Standard I feel almost like the Turkish immigrants could have their own section as their seems to be a lot of information about them. There could possibly be a section talking about religious differences or struggles that the immigrants have with relation to the local population.

Coding
Meets Standard Just the one that is mentioned in the sources section.

Validity
Meets standard Everything that is touched on seems verifiable.

Completion
Meets Standard The assignment calls for ten sources and two paragraphs of text: both are present. At least six sources seem to be academic journals.

Relevance
Meets Standard This seems pertinent to the subtopics selected.

Overall Comments
Hey Shayla, This is a great addition to the Berlin page. After a few spelling and grammatical edits this will be perfect!

Spelling/Grammar
Nearly meets standard. In the second sentence, there is a grammatical error "two most hottest topics". In the fourth sentence change requires to requirements. In sentence eight you can remove "the" before World War II. In the sentence where you used full-proof, " Germany's program was not full-proof, " you should use foolproof. Two sentences following that, scenario is misspelled.

Language
Nearly Meets standard. In the second sentence I would say "Immigration is currently an important topic in Germany", or something along those lines. Overall good encyclopedic tone and diction.

Organization
Meets standard. Great paragraphs and headers, good organization. Good job!

Coding
Exceeds standard. Lots of links to other pages, looks great.

Validity
Exceeds standard. Good and valid information pertaining to Immigration to Berlin, and Living/Integrating.

Completion
Nearly Meets standard. You have enough sources, just need to fix some spelling and grammatical errors.

Relevance
Exceeds standard. I think that this is all relevant information for the Berlin page.

Overall Comments
Looks good! There was one thing that I noticed that the others did not touch on. Keep reading to see what that was.

Spelling/Grammar
Meets standard Good job!

Language
Meets standard I would have probably said "Immigration puts a strain on many social..." in the sentence "It puts strain on many social and governmental aspects of a country, such as its "...social services, local schools, property taxes, language standards, etc.,"". If the sentence in question were a stand alone sentence, no one would know what 'it' is. I think you could have also had a semi-colon instead of a period before the statement in question in order to continue with the previous noun representing the word it... I think.

Organization
Meets standard. Hey! Yet another good job!

Coding
Meets standard. Looks good!

Validity
Meets standard. Super valid!

Completion
Meets standard. It's complete. You did the thing!

Relevance
Meets standard. As relevant as it gets.