User talk:ShellyG1/sandbox

Ryan's review of your page
[comments will go here] — Preceding unsigned comment added by Rstlaurent (talk • contribs) 16:15, 8 February 2019 (UTC)

Introduction

Regarding reference [1] in the first sentence, I think it would also be good to reference APG IV, rather than just a website. Even though APG IV doesn't say explicitly that Diapensiaceae is a crown group or the number of genera/species, it still is a good, recent reference for the validity of this taxon. Just a suggestion.

Second sentence: the word "genera" is linked again (it was already linked in the first sentence); I don't think it needs to be linked multiple times, just the first mention. Otherwise, I really like this sentence as it succinctly sums up the entire diversity of the family one genus at a time, giving species-level diversity for each and a link for each genus. However, as per Wiki guidelines, citations always go at the end of the sentence, so put all references at the end of the sentence.

I recommend combining the last two sentences as such: Members of this family have little economic importance, however, some members are cultivated by florists. Note the added "s" on "florist".

Taxonomy

Paragraph 1: First sentence: What does "old" family mean? Recognized for a long time? Existing in nature for a long time (long evolutionary history)?

Third sentence: I suggest inserting a word: The family, originally including only Diapensia lapponica, was named by Heinrich Friedrich Link in 1829.

Fourth sentence: The word "regarding" is used twice; and Schizocodon and Shortia should be italicized

Sixth sentence: Do you have a citation for the sentence starting with "Additionally, recognition..." or is it the same as in the previous sentence? If so, maybe include reference [13] on both so it is clear.

Seventh sentence: Pyxidanthera should be italicized

Eighth sentence: Change "morphology" for "morphological"; "do not have different morphology" could be better worded as: "do not differ morphologically"

Paragraph 2: First sentence: "overtime" -> "over time" (use the adverb, "overtime" is a noun); relationship -> relationships

Second sentence: Has Diapensiaceae been placed within the Rosales? I am not sure what "with" Rosales means (I do not have access to the cited source so I cannot confirm). Note also that as per Wiki guidelines citations always go at the end of the sentence, so put both references [15] and [16] at the end of the sentence.

Third sentence: Does reference [17] refer to the placement of Diapensiaceae in an order of its own in both the Cronquist system and by Takhtajan? I ask because I see the author of [17] is Takhtajan. If that reference doesn't mention the placement of Diapensiaceae in an order of its own as per the Cronquist system, then include a citation for that as well. Note also that there is an unnecessary space between "[17]" and the end of the sentence.

Fifth sentence: There is another unnecessary space between "[19]" and the end of the sentence.

Distribution

Italicize the genera in the genera column. Include wikilinks to North America and East Asia. Wikilinks should also be included for all geographic localities in the second column of the table: Tibet, China, Burma, United States, China, Taiwan (and also circumboreal).

Characteristics

First sentence: Wikilink for "shrub", and maybe define what a shrublet is?

Second sentence: Wikilinks for "flower", "radial symmetry"; change "5" to "five".

Third sentence: Wikilink for "carpel" (there is no page for this term specifically, so maybe link to Gynoecium)

Fourth sentence: Wikilink for mycorrhiza

In the table, italicize the genus names in the first column. I think it would be good to add Wikilinks for perennial. Is "life form" a typical term for plant morphology? If not, maybe just title this column with "morphology" since life form can mean several different things (to me anyway). Finally, the citation [24] seems to be just floating at the end of the table, to what does this refer?

Overall, a very nice page. I learned a lot! (I had never heard of this family before) This page is particularly well-referenced, which is extremely helpful to check certain terms and information included on your page.

17:44, 10 February 2019 (UTC) — Preceding unsigned comment added by Rstlaurent (talk • contribs)

feedback
Hi good job so far. One thing you can improve, however, is reusing citations for duplicated references. In one of your classmate's sandbox, for example, you can see that some of the references have multiple footnotes next to them, indicating each time they were used, instead of relisting the whole reference again for each use. To fix your duplicated references while in visual editor, click "cite" and then click "re-use". This will show the reference that are already in use in the article. Reusing citations keeps the reference section nice and neat! Let me know if you have any questions moving forward. Elysia (Wiki Ed) (talk) 20:20, 11 February 2019 (UTC)

Comments from Emily
[I assume you'll be updating the existing page with your new text; make sure that you keep the taxonomy box that's on that page.]

Diapensiaceae (Link) Lindley is a small family of flowering plants, classified as a crown group, which includes 15 species in 6 genera. The genera include Berneuxia Decne. (1 species), Diapensia L. (5 species), Galax Sims (1 species), Pyxidanthera Michx. (2 species), Shortia Torr. & A.Gray (4 species), and Schizocodon Siebold & Zucc. (2 species). Members of this family have little economic importance, however, some members are cultivated by florists.

Taxonomy
Past literature classified Diapensiaceae as an old family, without defining the meaning of old. The name Diapensia [please link these to their wikipedia pages]was given to Diapensia lapponica by Linnaeus, previously, it was the Greek name of Sanicle. The family, originally including only Diapensia lapponica, was named by Heinrich Friedrich Link in 1829. Concerning the interrelationships in Diapensiaceae, debate still remains regarding the recognition of Schizocodon, and whether it should beseparate from Shortia. However, recent molecular studies support the split of the two genera. Additionally, recognition of species within the genera has been debated. Within the genera [genus, not genera] Pyxidanthera, two species have previously been recognized. Recent morphology and molecular work found that the two species do not differ morphologically and gene flow exists between them.

Over time [add space here], various relationships among Diapensiaceae and other angiosperm families have been proposed. Previously, it was placed within the order Rosales, as well as in the Cornales. Diapensiaceae was also placed in an order of its own in the Cronquist system and by Takhtajan [link to wiki page for him]. Recent studies have placed Diapensiaceae as part of the Ericales [link to wiki page] clade, belonging to the “styracoids” (Diapensiaceae, Styracaceae, Symplocaceae). It is estimated that Diapensiaceae diverged from Sytracaceae about 93 million years ago. The family is thought to have originated in the Northern Hemisphere.

Distribution
Diapensiaceae family members are mostly found in North America and Eastern Asia.

Characteristics
Diapensiaceae family members are mostly herbs or shrublets. Flowers have radial symmetry, are hypogynous, and have most parts arranged in whorls of5. The ovary is made of three fused carpels. They have both ectotrophic and endotrophic mycorrhiza associations.

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