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PACIFIA, The Journey
Pacifia, The Journey is the first work of fiction authored by writer Y.M. Bruck. The story depicts the journey taken by thirteen-year-old aspiring athlete Daniel White and his friends, Amy Taylor and Tammy Fulbright after they become stranded at sea en route to a sports competition in Australia. After a violent storm shipwrecks their cruise liner, the friends, also called “The Trio” in the book, discover a US army tank hidden in the hull of the ship which they successfully use to board Pacifia, a mysterious island in the middle of the Pacific Ocean.

Much of the story follows the adventures, encounters and challenges faced by The Trio on Pacifia, including their struggle to survive amidst the sometimes brutal culture of the Menasea, the natives inhabiting Pacifia. A recurring theme in the story is the complicated relationship developed between Daniel, Amy and Tammy and the different members of the royal Menasean family who agree to host The Trio at Basileia, the luxurious royal palace on Pacifia. For example, while Queen Hadria repeatedly intervenes to save their lives and is depicted as kind and benevolent, King Jehoram sabotages The Trio’s attempt to leave Pacifia and is depicted as authoritarian and rather rigid. Another key protagonist is the royal prince, Immanuel, who becomes nearly inseparable from The Trio and their travails and develops a strong affinity for Tammy.

A significant portion of the plot is dedicated toward describing the ongoing war between the Menasea who inhabit The Highlands of Pacifia, and a rebel group of natives known as the Iskara, who inhabit The Lowlands of Pacifia. The friction between the two groups of natives stems from the rivalry and power struggle between King Jehoram and his devious younger brother, Antiminus, who regularly plots to wrest control of the island and seeks to dethrone Jehoram. Geographically separating the two groups is a steep and barren valley located just at the edge of Saltus, a small forest lining Pacifia.

Saltus also serves as the site of construction of a special escape raft intended for The Trio’s planned journey back home. Saltus is chosen due to its plentiful supply of Balsa trees, which produce wood that is water resistant and thus ideal to endure the journey amid the high seas. The raft is named Weck’s Gloryafter Mrs. Weck, The Trio’s English teacher back home in Los Angeles who, despite being reviled by the students as a disgusting and ineffective teacher, nonetheless later evokes memories of home and becomes a symbol of their efforts to regain their freedom.

In charge of the construction of the raft, as well as many other central initiatives and projects in the book, is Abiel, the chief scientist of Pacifia who is also King Jehoram’s key advisor and a senior member of the powerful elders committee. The narrative portrays Abiel in a generally positive light, although at times, he, too, is mistrusted by The Trio, mainly as a result of his testimony against them in a public trial that nearly leads to their execution.

Along with the Iskara and their leader, Antiminus, the other primary antagonists of the book areDrake Turner, Campbell Cooperand Violet Reed, a group of three thugs known as The Gang who attended the same school as The Trio back home in Los Angeles. They, too, are aboard the Queen Victoria and go missing when it gets caught in the violent storm at sea. However, The Trio later learn that The Gang also eventually found their way onto Pacifia, where they were welcomed by Antiminus and The Iskara. The battles and rivalry between the warring natives on Pacifia play out in parallel between The Trio and The Gang at different points throughout the story.

While the book is written and marketed primarily for young audiences, it tends to include themes, issues and ideas which are rather adult in nature. For example, socio-political barriers and territorial disputes are explored within the context of the ongoing war between the Menasea and the Iskara. Another example is the protagonists’ evolving views of the merits of modernity and technology amidst the backdrop of the simple, unsophisticated and “primitive” state of things on Pacifia. Classic challenges of dealing with issues like maturity, love and death are brought to the forefront by the coming-of-age nature of the storyline.

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StevenJ81 (talk) 01:23, 5 January 2014 (UTC)

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 * I have been to Mount Sinai and my comment was based on my own research. Why is this not acceptable? Pleas explain..


 * Wikipedia is not the place to publish your own research and write from your own experience. The explaination is on the page WP:NOR. Rankersbo (talk) 07:47, 20 January 2014 (UTC)

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Proposed deletion of Pacifia


The article Pacifia has been proposed for deletion&#32; because of the following concern:
 * First novel from a non-notable author with no evidence of significance of the book. Based on name of publisher, it looks to be published by the author rather than a major house. With an ISBN, I don't think this qualifies under CSD A11, though.

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Your draft article, User:Shirawhite/sandbox


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Thanks for your submission to Wikipedia, and happy editing. Rankersbo (talk) 20:25, 24 July 2014 (UTC)