User talk:Shoujess/sandbox

Feedback on potential topics
These both look like good articles to work on. In the case of Takahata in particular, I think there is a lot of information out there you could draw from, and the article in its current state is kind of a mess.

I noticed that you chose two articles from my list of topics immediately related to the class. This is not a problem, but also note that you're allowed to work on *any* article related to Japanese or Korean pop culture--AKB48, for example. Just wanted to make that clear. Ctextor at uofu (talk) 04:24, 11 February 2018 (UTC)

Feedback on Project Proposal
This is looking good so far. Nice job with the bibliography in particular, though of course there are many more sources you can go to if you're not finding what you need here. The main thing you need to do at this point is continue to narrow the topic. You have a lot of ideas for content that could be added or improved, and if you can execute all of those ideas that's great! But it might turn out to be an enormous project. So if you decide what you really want to do is flesh out the Music section or the Television section, that's perfectly fine. Just remember that you won't be judged on what the article looks like when you're done (so don't worry if it's still not up to snuff), only on the contribution you made. Ctextor at uofu (talk) 21:31, 26 February 2018 (UTC)

kappanjoe's Peer Review
I think your draft added plenty of useful information, which is great! I would suggest adding citations if possible to the first few sentences because they seem to veer into non-common knowledge territory. (i.e., What says kawaii is a driving force behind aesthetic culture? And what examples are there of it being associated with fancy goods, idols, etc.?) I also noticed that a lot of the original text was omitted from the revision. If you were planning on removing it, I wonder if any extra sources can be found to maybe cite and keep some of that original text? I would also suggest maybe adding a few more direct links to other Wikipedia pages, for example with Japan's "Ministry of Foreign Affairs." There was one grammar fix I think could be made: in the second sentence, I believe it should read "Kawaii culture has its ties...," vs. the possessive it's. Anyway, overall it looks great! Good luck!!

Kappanjoe (talk) 21:55, 5 April 2018 (UTC)

So I found all the information on character and fancy goods from the Yano source and treated it like a paper in the sense that I cited it when I was done using it. Should I still change it? I'll look into keeping some of the original text but in general, I just didn'tmlike it so that was probably rude on my part. I'll add more links and fix that error. Thanks! Shoujess (talk) 21:43, 13 April 2018 (UTC)

Peer Review
I agree with a lot of what Joe has written so far. It's looking good! I like the sources that you've chosen so far, but perhaps it would be useful to review and cross-reference some of the information you've found already with some other sources. Also, after reading through the potential ideas that you've highlighted to add information to, I feel that there's a lot of this article that could use some work, and the sources you've already chosen may contain some information pertaining to some of the topics. I'm actually quite surprised how barren this article originally is, as I figured there would be people aggressively posting about this sort of stuff. I think capturing an 'encyclopedic' tone is quite difficult, but what you've written so far seems pretty fitting within the article in tone. Nakita Pike (talk) 03:28, 7 April 2018 (UTC)

Yeah, it's kind of craptastic and I almost didn't know where to start. I haven't made it through all the sources yet but I'll get on that. Thank you! Shoujess (talk) 21:46, 13 April 2018 (UTC)

CT Feedback
I agree with Nakita that the tone of this draft is especially strong. Your sources are also excellent. For you now it's mostly a matter of continuing to add to the article in order to get to your five source threshold. It looks like you're planning to add to the Internet subsection? Ctextor at uofu (talk) 15:07, 10 April 2018 (UTC)

Strong in a good way? es, I've considered overhauling the internet subsection, it's just a matter of finding sources that back up what I know. Shoujess (talk) 21:38, 13 April 2018 (UTC)