User talk:ShoutingCloth

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Hello, ShoutingCloth, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Brianda and I work with Wiki Education; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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Welcome!
Welcome to Wikipedia, ShoutingCloth. We hope you'll decide to stay. This is not necessarily a message of concern, but I see that you're a student in a WikiEd course, so I thought I'd drop by to give you some feedback on one of your sandboxes, User:ShoutingCloth/Multicultural Education, from the point of view of a Wikipedian.

You are allowed to make a wide range of test edits and host considerable ranges of content in user sandboxes, so there is no issue with the way things currently are. However, if you intend to eventually publish the sandbox mentioned above into article space, there are several issues that you would need to pay attention to.


 * First and foremost, Wikipedia articles are not essays. While you have done a good job of sourcing your statements, many sentences in the article such as Food is an integral part of culture or Food provides a better overall understanding of a person's culture through many different aspects. This is understandable... represent opinionated statements or personal feelings, rather than encyclopaedic fact. The entire article also appears to be arguing for a single point of view (that is, the correlation between food and culture) using a typical essay structure (point, example, elaboration, etc). This is unlikely to pass review, for example at Articles for creation.
 * The title, "Multicultural education", neither clearly indicates the article scope nor accurately describes the content of the article currently. The current content describes the diversity in food preparation methods and the effect this can have on perceptions on culture, but there is obviously a lot more to education than food; moreover, it is also not clear whether "multicultural education" means education about cultures, education with cultures, education to a multicultural cohort, etc etc. See MOS:TITLE for some details on how to write an article title.

Again, welcome to Wikipedia. Feel free to ask any questions you may have about this by clicking the [reply] button at the end of this message, or by posting a message on my talk page. Thank you! Fermiboson (talk) 13:27, 2 December 2023 (UTC)