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Peer Review -- Jonathan Friedman
Overall, I thought the article did a great job at describing the topic at hand in a clear and concise way. I especially thought the article improved the way that people not from China could understand the topic. Overall, the sections are well ordered and the article seems unbiased, neutral, and fact based. The sources seemed reliable, although I could not read Chinese/tell if those sources were reliable or well used, which did make this peer review a bit of a challenge.. I did notice one of the sources was CCTV and I wonder if there is any state censorship that effects its content. I think it might be helpful to include more modern sources from the international press if there are any, assuming that there have been changes in the Internet Water Army since 2011.

Overall, I think it would be good to be more clear about the environment around the Internet Water Army. I'm curious more about exactly how the environment allows these techniques to play out and the ramifications of such a phenomenon and how the country/government views this/if it's legal. There are also a few things that confuse me. The sentence "The Internet Water Army industry has generated over 7.6 billion RMB in three months and has made over 2500 transactions" doesn't really clarify in what period, especially given that the sources are spaced out over 8 years. Additionally, "China, with more than 400 million web users," is from a 2010 figure and is not up to date. It's also not all that clear who gets paid to remove negative posts and feedback. Just overall, the techniques section seems quite convoluted and could be clarified. The profits section is good, but I'm just wondering if the actual social media/internet companies are making money from this or if it is just the marketing agencies. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Jlfriedman4 (talk • contribs) 17:35, 16 November 2018 (UTC)