User talk:Sierrasummers/sandbox

Peer Review
-Intro: The introduction looks nice and is to the point. Has a glimpse of the information without going into detail. -Hunting section: I would put "hunting with hounds", "ferreting", and "spotlighting" under the hunting section because they're a type of hunting and I think it might make more sense. -Trapping methods: Putting in pictures of each trap would help to understand what they are. Also, are the traps that you mention legal and does the legality depend on where you are? -Ferreting:The second sentence in that first paragraph is confusing. Also is ferreting still common today? -Last notes: The only thing I would add is, I was confused if rabbiting was just for fun or if people actually ate the rabbits? Other that that your article looks really nice and is really easy to follow. Lynseymae (talk) 01:24, 28 October 2018 (UTC)

Peer Review
You have a really good introduction, it isn't too long but it gets the message across. As others have said, "Hunting with hounds" "Spotlighting" and "Ferreting" can probably be moved under the Hunting section as they are methods used to hunt. I am wondering if there is more that could be added to the regulations section, as it seems pretty short, what about other countries in Europe or North America? There are some minor grammar/sentence structures that could probably use improvement, specifically in the hunting section. Other than that this is a well done article draft.--Mp4lyfe (talk) 03:36, 29 October 2018 (UTC)

Draft feedback
Hi, Sierra!

You've made strong improvements to this article in the hunting and history sections in particular, and changing the U.K.-specific section to being more broadly about regulations is a good organizational shift.

For continued work/expansion on this article, you might look at the lead section, other relevant regulations, and perhaps more depth in the history section. What are you finding in your sources that isn't in the article yet?

Some things to consider in revising the parts that are already in this draft...sentence work (there are some sentences that need fixing or could have clearer language choices, some small things like its/it's fixes. One that stood out to me was the second sentence of the "Trapping Methods" section. The "...rather, however..." phrasing in the middle of it is a bit confusing.) Also make sure that things you are stating as fact are supported by a source (for example, the final paragraph in the "Historic Rabbiting" section makes a number of statements that should be supported by sources, but only has one reference at the end of the paragraph.)

As you move forward in working on this article, can you also wait to move any more of it out of your sandbox until your work on it is complete? There are some grammar fixes, link fixes, etc. happening on the main page since you updated it (and that still need to happen on it) that would likely have been fixed before ever getting moved to the main page if they had gone through the feedback/revision process in your sandbox first. Since your existing work has already been moved out of your sandbox, you will want to make sure you don't undo the corrections that have happened to that work on the main page when you move over any new parts of your article.

I look forward to seeing what else you add to this! Nicoleccc (talk) 22:13, 28 October 2018 (UTC)