User talk:Simmonelandau/sandbox

Tone
The tone is good. I would link words 'Saccharomyces Cerevisae' to the existing wikipedia page. Search "Wikipedia:Manual of Style/Linking" if you dont remember how to do this. Fits in well with what is already written under the topic. Bryantlib (talk) 04:39, 1 May 2018 (UTC)

Content
Instructor comments: Species name is lower case & you misspelled it. For this sentence: Fermentations will carry on until (one of three things happens: T- omit this) the yeasts run out of sugar and can no longer metabolize, the yeasts run out of yeast assimilable nitrogen (YAN) resulting in a “stuck” fermentation[2], or the fermentation is stopped by introducing an inhibitive chemical like sulfur dioxide. I would broadly combine 1 and 2 into ‘yeasts run out of nutrients’ since it could be another nutrient. Sulfur dioxide is not inhibitory to S. cerevisiae at concentrations we would add to cider, so the last part of that sentence needs to be changed, too. Sometimes the yeast or another microbe can produce inhibitory compounds (even ethanol and acetic acid can halt fermentation).Oenotropae (talk) 19:05, 4 May 2018 (UTC)

Before making the paragraph 'live'
Remember to work with group members when uploading to the live page to ensure you dont upload the same information. Also consider how you will insert your information into the existing cider page. You may have to break up your sentences or not include everything depending on the information that is already on the page.

PROOFREAD your paragraph before you make your information 'live'.

Before you post make sure one person in your group created a new section on the Cider apple talk page you are uploading to, letting the people watching the page know you are making edits. And also make sure you summarize your final change, when submitting to the live page. If you don't remember how to do these steps, re-watch the tutorial. :)Bryantlib (talk) 15:25, 7 May 2018 (UTC)

Adding information to Cider page
You are inserting information on the Cider page, which is semi-protected, to add your paragraphs to the live page, you will need to have made at least 10 edits. You can do this in several ways. editing in your sandbox or a group member's sandbox, or/and going through and doing the steps in the tutorial all add edits to your username. Basically you change something and hit 'publish changes' it counts as an edit. The little box called 'Notices' on the top right of all the Wikipedia pages tells you when you have made 10 edits. Bryantlib (talk) 15:25, 7 May 2018 (UTC)