User talk:Simmons.ashley/sandbox

Peer Review by Alex Holbrook
This is an amazing draft and is full of information already. One thing i noticed is that you're lacking sources, but other than that its very strong and informative. I don't know much about the human body, but I know a little bit more about bones now after reading that. Your information is clear and well organized. I don't relate to the topic and probably wouldn't pick it, so i can't really suggest what to add other than citations and more sources. Holbrook.alex98 (talk) 20:20, 31 July 2018 (UTC)holbrook.alex98

Peer review
Peer Review

Amazing work on the draft of this topic! I love how you organize your information and put in those 2 tables. The information is clear and understandable. Moreover, you can always expands and talk more about that topic. I learned Anatomy last term and it shocked me with how much information I needed to remember about bones as well as joints. I also think you should get more information on other sources instead of only one. Khoamac (talk) 06:32, 25 July 2018 (UTC)

Draft feedback
Hi Ashley!

I just reviewed the material in your sandbox. I'm not sure if this is an article you are still planning to add to (in which case, you will want to clarify what you are adding that is different than the existing articles around bones and the human skeletal system that necessitates a new article on the topic) or if you've selected an existing stub to improve instead. My biggest suggestions that will apply to any article you're working on are: --point of view. Since encyclopedia entries use a neutral third-person point of view, you will want to carefully edit out any you/I/we/our pronouns and "in my opinion" language in favor of more neutral third-person phrasing --sources. Since encyclopedia entries are essentially summaries of existing published material on a topic, credible/appropriate sources are critical, both as a references section at the end of an article and as in-line citations. Each time material from a source is used (which will be most statements of fact), that source (or sources if more than one you are working with gives this information) should be cited at the end of the sentence its material is used in.

I hope this helps some as you continue your work. If you are working on a stub article at this point rather than the bones article, I would be happy to look at a draft of that material as well. Nicoleccc (talk) 21:39, 29 July 2018 (UTC)