User talk:Sittinduck57/sandbox

Tone
Good use of tone and linking other wikipedia pages. Bryantlib (talk) 04:57, 1 May 2018 (UTC)

Content
Comments from Kathy: Try to find more recent articles to cite. Change the first sentence to clearly state what you mean: Saying, “a vital part of” doesn’t really say much. Are your ideas that acids are an important consideration during cider-making, and also important to final cider flavor, or...?

How do acids contribute to odor?

flavor = odor + taste + mouthfeel, so maybe you mean ‘taste’ instead of flavor in this sentence: They are present in both apples and cider, and contribute to flavor, color, odor and the fermentation process. Minor point: write malic acid with a lower case ‘m’ & lactic acid is ‘l’. You need to cite more statements (malic acid as major acid in apples, concentration of malic acid considered ‘a good amount’, lactic acid commonly found in ciders, etc.) Find the range for malic acid concentrations in apples, instead of referring to ‘a good amount’ and cite your source. Spelling error/typo: malo-lacitc fermentation

Clarify this sentence (“Acids also serve as a preservative in the cider”) by adding, “since lower pH values inhibit microbial growth” or something similar.

Clarify this sentence (Carbon dioxide is also produced during this process, and this rounds out the flavor of the cider while reducing a lot of the acidity.) As written, it sounds like CO2 rounds out the flavor… — Preceding unsigned comment added by Oenotropae (talk • contribs) 23:56, 2 May 2018 (UTC)

Before making the paragraph 'live'
Remember to work with group members when uploading to the live page to ensure you dont upload same information. Also consider how you will insert your information into the existing cider page. You may have to break up your sentences or not include everything depending on the information that is already on the page.

Proofread your paragraph before you make your information 'live'.

Before you post make sure one person in your group created a new section on the Cider apple talk page you are uploading to, letting the people watching the page know you are making edits. And also make sure you summarize your final change, when submitting to the live page. If you don't remember how to do these steps, re-watch the tutorial. :) Bryantlib (talk) 14:49, 7 May 2018 (UTC)

Adding information to Cider page
You are inserting information on the Cider page, which is semi-protected, to add your paragraphs to the live page, you will need to have made at least 10 edits. You can do this in several ways. editing in your sandbox or a group member's sandbox, or/and going through and doing the steps in the tutorial all add edits to your username. Basically you change something and hit 'publish changes' it counts as an edit. The little box called 'Notices' on the top right of all the Wikipedia pages tells you when you have made 10 edits. Bryantlib (talk) 15:01, 7 May 2018 (UTC)