User talk:Sivan 99

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Rachel Grady
Minor revisions needed. CropMilk (talk) 14:46, 23 October 2019 (UTC)
 * A great start and good sources!
 * I recommend writing a full paragraph for the lead section, as that is a standard feature of Wikipedia articles. Some guidelines here: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Wikipedia:Manual_of_Style/Lead_section
 * Ensure that the Controversy section cites/quotes secondary sources discussing the controversy around One of Us, rather than the filmmakers themselves. This will help ensure that your article maintains a neutral point of view.
 * It would be preferable to find secondary sources that discuss her films rather than quoting the filmmaker herself to make sure the tone remains neutral, and also since primary sources don't count towards notability.

Peer Review - Rachel Grady edits/comments

 * Bio is very small - maybe add more information or add it to the top part that explains who she is
 * Quite a few spelling errors, maybe re-read it again to find more I change a couple sentence.
 * Some sentences need more syntax, they don't flow very well
 * Don't link another Wikipedia page if it doesn't exist ex: Norman Lear: Just Another Version of You in the Filmography section
 * Filmography section would do without the 'subject matter" column it does not enhance the article, maybe instead put 'role'?

- good article though, with a lot of sources! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Ch8008766 (talk • contribs) 20:36, 2 November 2019 (UTC)