User talk:Sjb1213/sandbox

I like how you introduced the topic with the myths and cultural beliefs to provide extra background information. I think you should expand on gender inequality into the first subheading of the cultural beliefs. You could talk more about the effects of the patriarchal hegemony which could relate to other aspects of your article such as how it creates the barriers to education. For the format of your article, I think you should take "access to education" from your subheadings because it's repetitive especially since the heading already includes it. I think the source you chose is a good first hand account into the gender disparity. My only concern is that because it is first person, I can't help but feel that there is a little bias and subjectivity especially since there is a lack of surveys and statistical data. I think this shouldn't be a problem later on though as you gather more sources to back up your article. I think in regards to neutrality, you are doing a good job. Tddang14 (talk) 03:49, 18 October 2018 (UTC)