User talk:Sjols/sandbox

Peer Review Response - Jenny and Sam
Thank you for all of this great feedback. We reworked all the points you mentioned below. We really appreciate you taking time to review the article. In the first section, I tried to clarify the main points I was trying to get across. I took out all of the direct quotes and tried to tighten up the language. We had to change the direction we were going with the image usage due to copyright stuff. We instead made a table and then just described the other figures. I also linked to a wiki page with examples of unethical research to provide context to that point I made. If you have any further feedback, please let us know and we will rework the page! — Preceding unsigned comment added by 24.247.87.137 (talk) 01:27, 16 March 2015 (UTC)

Peer Review 1 - Melissa Stek
Role section: very thorough! Could be half as long with a few less direct quotes - what is the main point you’d like to get across here?

Importance section: “There is a poor history in not informing cultural minority stakeholders about the use of research and violation of their basic human rights.” Maybe link to other wiki pages with examples (i.e. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Tuskegee_syphilis_experiment) What does “AEA” stand for? I would also talk here about how and why engaging in evaluation in a culturally responsive manner is critical to evaluation outcomes/findings - what’s missing if evaluators don’t consider/respond to culture?

Role and Importance sections have some repetition that could be eliminated. Maybe include an example of a culturally responsive evaluation instead.

“Examples of Culturally Responsive Evaluation” section - I guess I would call this “examples of culturally responsive quantitative measures” or “examples of culturally responsive demographic information” or something more specific.

In looking at what you guys wrote as a whole, I would include an example or two of culturally responsive evaluations rather than the sample of culturally sensitive demographic questions. It would be a closer fit to what you describe in the previous sections, and it would give a concrete example as to why paying attention to cultural differences is important and how culturally responsive evaluation can be done well.

Also, I think the librarians mentioned this in class, but rather than listing the theories and checklists that you reference, you could include a link to them, and/or summarize them as helpful tools or strategies that the reader can look into further if they’d like to.

Peer Review: (a)	Content: great topic! at least 3 sections were added so good there. (b)	Figures: It looks like there's going to be figures and/or pictures - the writing alludes to it and there's temporary space-filler figures in the meantime. I'm sure they'll be good. :-) (c)	References: at least 6 references were added to the page, so great! Good sources, very valuable stuff!

Mlstek (talk) — Preceding undated comment added 01:16, 11 March 2015 (UTC)

Peer Review 2 - Raul Vargas
Role I will piggy back off Melissa and say that this section is very dense. There is a lot of information and I feel that there are quite a few sentences that may be condensed. It can definitely be condense just a little bit but otherwise this section looks fantastic!

Importance The first paragraph sounds a little biased. I believe it's the use of the word "poor" but it may just be me being a little to critical of the language. On the same sentence, is there a place where you can locate a source to cite where evaluations have exploited marginalized stakeholders? What is AEA? This section sounds like there is a lot of "critical reflection" or "Critical Consciousness" may want to add this? It's totally up to you but I highly recommend you look into it!

Frameworks They all look like they are spot on!!!

Examples at the bottom

When it comes to these identifiers, I have a lot of issues. However, due to the way the census categorizes individual's identities, it cannot be avoided. I quite enjoy seeing the "female" identity going before male when asking someone's gender identity. That's just me trying to stick it to the patriarchy. I find the wording on all of example 3 to be a little problematic due to the wording, especially since "sex" is also a social construct. Some of the more "progressive" items in a survey tend to use "gender" instead of "sex".

This sandbox looks absolutely fantastic! it really shows that you both put in a lot of work into it! Keep up the good work!

Peer Review: (a)	Content: I really like the topic and a critical view on evaluation (b)	Figures: I couldn't see the pictures for whatever reason but I know they're up there! (c)	References: More than enough resources!

SWWarrior2014SWWarrior2014 (talk) 03:15, 11 March 2015 (UTC)