User talk:SleepDrifter/Privatization of the electricity sector in Cameroon

Simon's peer review
Hello!

Overall, this article is neutral throughout each of its sections. One minor detail to consider is how dividing the "Outcomes of privatization" section into "Positive" and "Negative" may inherently suggest taking a stance. Perhaps assets and liabilities, or more plainly, gains and losses, may be stronger alternatives.

Moreover, much of the article needs citations. For instance, the first paragraph under the Background section states, "Starting in 1978, Cameroon knew an economic boom that lasted until 1986. During this period, real gross domestic product (GDP) grew 8.8% a year in average. By 1986, per capita real GDP had risen by 52%." This requires citations. It might be the case that the citation at the end of the paragraph was used for the aforementioned statistics, but the reader is unaware of that. In short, I would strongly encourage each and every fact, statistic, and claim to be backed by citations. Regardless, the citations that are referenced seem reputable!

By the way, there is a typo in the second paragraph of the Reforms section. Privatizations was spelled incorrectly in the second sentence.

The article is off to a terrific start! With just a few tweaks (e.g., citations, being more conscious about potentially developing opinions), it will be even stronger. Great job!

Salam211 (talk) 05:33, 4 April 2022 (UTC)Salam211